nightRox
Love your story , have a few questions hope you answer if he knows about the prince inheritance arc or war why not try to find some countermeasure against that or a way to block or seal any hatsu or specialist ability. Also cant he come up with a way to steal hatsu or make himself a artificial chimera ant , it would be a good boost finally the nen writing which ging used on the cube why not make it like seals or runes
I won't lie. I've only read the first chapter and dropped this. But for a good reason. The Author chose a name that is completely out of tune with the names of the other Zolydyck Children. Now, you may be thinking, 'That's not a big deal'. But it is. It shows the author has a sub-standard understanding of the Zolydck family and maybe even HxH as a whole. The Zolydcks have an interesting and tumultuous relationship that has to be approached properly. Reading about a MC that has the name Amon just ruins it for me. Idk, if you have no taste and don't respect the original work, maybe you'll enjoy this.
the writing quality is great I haven't even been able to find a single grammar or spelling mistake stability of updates are great idk when he released em but we usually get 2-3 chapters a week, we just reached cannon so they might push the speed of chapters for motivation or stick with their usual routine, either way i am okay story development is amazing, they actually look at the zoldyck family even at Kikyo and showing time with her and the mc character design is good they stay relative to the zoldyck colors unlike some others where mc is a rainbow haired zoldyck or smth they make the mc a bit weak which gives a 4/5 if there was an option to give 4.5 i would because they actually have variety and not just show handsome in all characters world background is alright
Writing quality is good. But this ff is suffering from lets call it "protagonist simp main character" its when instead of focusing on his own adventure, gaining power ect. Mc go and find the protagonist. join Luffy pirates, befriends Naruto and babysit them with knolage of future. Here mc is stick around Killua, and their relationship... Mc is kinda acting Beta too much. Btw. Portals are meh Keep it up. Good luck. Goodbye!
IMO the Amon shouldn't be chained down to the protagonists(Gon, Killua, Leorio, Kurapika), although it's nice that he sometimes hangs out with them. He needs to do his own things, being by himself or with people other than the four main characters. I also don't think he should teach Nen to Killua and Gon, the basics would be alright, but not advanced nen, Bisky ought to teach them. Making him join Genei Ryodan and romance Machi would be something I'd rather enjoy since I like a little bit of romance in everything.
Ok, you kinda need to stop babysitting Gon and Killua, the Hunter world is pretty huge, there is a lot you could explore and make, i just hope its a phase that will end with the Hunter Exam Arc. But anyways, still its an enjoyable read. I will not ask for romance now since his physical age is that of a kid and it seems to be affecting his mental age as well, but i hope do you keep that in mind, since most people usually go for either the full psycho mc or retarded mc on hxh novels since it seems its the easiest one.
Good FF of HxH. The first part (the non-canonical one) is really great, but when the story of the exam begins, the fiction loses a lot. You hurry too much and stop describing, at least less than before. I'm glad though that up until now there have been no changes in the characters, and that it's not a copy and paste of the original story, as the presence of the MC is making a difference. Recommended!