Go back and edit it if you noticed the mistake....
You switched point of view in the middle of your chapter. You should fix it.
Look, man... You randomly threw in a 'system'. It feels totally wrong and forced. 'Trash' was probably needlessly harsh though. I just hate system novels.
Oh god. What trash.
I thought the Oharan's only deciphered one Poneglyh by the time they were all killed off, and it wasn't one about Joyboy, but rather the name of the ancient Kingdom.
Not interested in Vegapunk as a love interest personally. Also don't like genderbending of characters. I read these kinds of fanfics to see someone different in whatever way interact in the world I know, not a world the author changes on a whim.
It's pretty good guys. One of the best fanfics I've read for sure. Looking forward to what is in store for us. The only issue is I have is that the author does ask for the opinion of his readers a lot. Now, this isn't an issue per say... but since most readers on this site are brain dead, it worries me a little. lol.
Honestly, the author has a really good understanding of the Witcher, so I was really interested in this. The thing is... reading 20+ chapters about a child is really effin boring. The direction the story is going is just not something I want to read... but you may be different. Give it a go.
Gotta be either Overhaul or Particle style. No point in the eyes with his Haki.
Hmm. He wants to be free. That's his dream, so his power and abilities should be based around that. He's also a man of science and would heavily analyse combat styles and such before choosing the most efficient. I'd even go as fast to say he's arrogant enough to create a new style by incoporating Hasshoken/Fishman/Rokushiki. As for weapon. Simplicity is best. A single sword like Shanks (a hand guard of larger stature than a katana would be seen as the more logical choice imo)
He should take Wapol. Lock him up and turn him into a factory.
Since Genus is a man of science.... It is illogical to limit your eye-sight by styling your hair in such a way!
Gene enhancing would increase the level of strength he needs to breach the 'limit'... Or at least, that's what I think.
Seems like it