MisterImmortal
Nice story bro... But I don't know why, I can never seem to read past the first dozens of your chapters in all your fics. After some pages, something in my mind just says 'enough' and then I can't seem to enjoy the rest of fic anymore. Is it just me? I feel it is just me. Anyway seem to be progress toward a dope future plot based on first couple of chapters.
If you are not an American, you will feel annoyed by reading this novel. The hero takes advantage of every opportunity to increase America's power and show it as a country of peace, even though it is not, while other countries such as Japan, Germany and Russia appear as villains in the main. It is similar to Chinese novels, but it is an American version
Let's start off with the positives. The grammar is excellent. The story is somewhat unique in a way, in that it doesn't follow the whole cannon timeline wholesale but has its own twist. Now, these are the areas I don't like. First, this story has a ton load of history, like a lot which I guess if you're into that it's fun but for me, it was boring why because he's already op and most of the interaction was him beating them up so I skipped most of it. Secondly, the story is biased toward the Americans which was slightly annoying. Third, why make a character so op but the villains he faces so nerf, either he kills them off-screen or they fight him with no sort of expertise. For example, the ancient one, are you telling someone whose master of the ancient arts is defeated so easily like she didn't even investigate his being an anomaly. please she should at least give him a run for his money. By no means is the story great, is ok at best to me. If you have nothing to read and wanna kill some time but it becomes a drag after a while.
Boringly done. People act like NPCs and don't notice anything. For example, how their old president does various tricks. ............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I like it but it feels to force at times and there are factual errors that annoying but base research would fix it such as the us Air Force was founded on 18 of September 1947 before it was know as United States Army Air Forces and before that it was United States Army Air Corps so you know research a bit I mean I didn’t that the USAAC was a thing I always thought that it was just USAAF and it took me five seconds to find that out Again I like it but I think it could be better
The last time I posted a review on one of your stories was on Grandpa Universe...So hi 👋 😃 Anyway, here's my rating for the first 28 chapters so far (Coming from a Flower whose first language is not English, so don't hate on my grammar.): WQ: ⭐⭐⭐⭐ As always, it is top-notch. There are some exceptions to this, but in no way do they distract- or make the story unreadable. SoU: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ 28 chapters in one day?! I'd give it 10/5...Bad jokes aside, based on the update schedule of MisterImmortal's previous stories, I can only assume this one will be the same. 1-2 chapters a day. SD: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ At the start, it was a bit rushed, but that is mostly because of a massive information dump happening in the early chapters to build Hector's background. After the first 4-6 chapters, it will slow down a bit. CD: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ As always, MisterImmortal manages to pull off a very likeable main character. Personally, I love when the MC is an old man/woman. I feel it adds a sort of mystery and uniqueness. Besides that, Hector has been shown to be absolutely ruthless to his enemies, but loving to those he views as family. (I am looking at you Moony...and Satan 😉) Furthermore, he uses his knowledge to his advantage, planning ahead for the future. WB: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ It is marvel. What could go wrong? I know it is an AU, but that is exactly right up my alley. Concerning the changes Hector has made - I can only say that I enjoy them 😃. This is the first time I have seen a fanfiction with an MC being REALLY involved in politics. Usually, they just use their knowledge about the future to invest and become multi-billionaires and not much more. Furthermore, MisterImmortal has clearly (to the extent of my knowledge) done his research concerning WW2. Total score: 4.8 PS: Can't spoil much in the review. If you want to know what changes Hector has made and how it affects the MCU, please read it yourself. I promise you (most likely) won't regret it. Thanks for taking the time to read through my review/rant. I hope you have a nice day 😅.
Writing: OK with little mistakes (4star) Story development: It is good but some things would be better if it was different in my opinion sind the development is little to slow for me.(3stars) Character Design: OK but would be little better (4star) update stability: Don't know am still new and not at latest chapter so thats why a neutral good 4 star. World Background: Well its Marvel with little changes so 4 stars (Am about chapter 45) Overall Currently REVIEW: 3.8