MajestyGloxinia
I'm quite new to Qidian and I'm looking for great books to read that are still under development. This book struck me a good deal. Please keep updating for I'm excited in how this world will turn out and its character development. Grammar and such could be improve, but I don't find it hard to read at some part. If compared to other books that are new, a few stand out in that and one of those is this one. If I may add, its quite descriptive and I enjoy that despite being gory and morbid at most part. Goodluck with your story.
Unlike most other world stories, you took the unique path of making Rael enter in a hellish world as the lowest “class.” Another point of difference are the seeds. So overall, this world stands out among stories of “systems” or typical magic. There’s a few minor typos that can easily fixed, like capitalization or a missing space. Altho, where did you pick up putting spaces between the quote ends and beginnings? It’s my first time seeing that. This was written well overall; however, I would’ve liked to know more about his first experiences in the new world. It was mentioned that it was a hell world, but I was confused whether he was transferred or restarted. I even reread the beginning after chapter 12. Does the small hands mean he’s a child now? Has he just started living or has he been there a while? He seems rather familiar with the world right away. Ahh maybe I’m getting this all wrong, but since a lot of the events so were occurring to 171, the girl, I didn’t figure this out. Otherwise keep it up! The action moves quickly, but it has good detail. I’d say this is your biggest strength.
Great work! The story is developing very nicely, but there are too few chapters out for me to properly get the direction of where it is going. Grammar is as written 'GOLD' and it really he** freshen up the characters and world building. Also, there are other aspects that are rather..'more detailed' than one would expect, but I for one, don't mind. Keep up the good work! This will definitely get big. 5/5 for me
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