Review Detail of StenDuring in God's Authority

This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 15. We have a darker kind of reincarnation story here. Man dies on earth, meets godlike being and gets dumped into system fantasyland. End of standard story. Being reincarnated as the lowest of the low basically constitutes as going to hell. Apart from the male lead there are quite a few supporting characters, both allies as well as antagonists. As of chapter fifteen it's clear there's some kind of conflict between two factions. It should also be noted that the main character at this stage of the story mostly is reactive. He gets dragged into events rather that deciding his own future. At the very last chapter we're shown how he does take a stance, but I have no idea where it's going. Poor English, shaky handing of tense and the wavering between third person omniscient point of view and third person limited point of view all detract from the reding experience. Add that the story is rather confusing. Explaining the world in terms of system mechanics also means that the story grinds to a halt from time to time. Now for the stars. Writing: Three stars. The story needs line-editing. The English used is poor enough to force the reader to reread lines from time to time. Updates: Four stars. The fifteen chapters published this far come with several holes in the delivery. Story: Four stars. While confusing it's an interesting plot. Character: Four stars. Three characters are slowly gaining a personality. I can see this evolving into a fifth star within another dozen or so chapters. World: Three stars. While we're served system data on a dystopic setting said world really isn't experienced by the characters. More often than not we're merely told it's their personal hell. Lastly, given a language overhaul and quite a bit more showing rather than telling I have high hopes for where this story is going.