Reviews of Danmachi - Card Wizard
Danmachi - Card Wizard
Shireneko
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Just read the first 13 chapters and am enjoying it so far! From whats happening so far im assuming the mc will be paired with ais(romantically and for adventurers) which i 100% support. Not sure if this will be a harem or just ais but im fine with either as long as its a small harem. His magic is really interesting and he could do a lot with it in the future. Author already said that they prefer the slow pacing and I agreeβ¦.if he is op and levels up in a month then kinda ruins the story. Keep up the good work ill support
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The story is fantastic so far since this boyo here (me), has read up to chapter 22 and let me tell you. This story is an actual well-paced FF of danmachi. The mc got some heritage benefits from his mom n' pops which gives him so much potential to work with, either for writing or if you were in his shoes. The characters feel alive including Ais since its hard to write a expressionless character without making them into just cardboard cutouts. Hecc, even the mob characters still gets some reasonable lines to give us, the readers, and the Mc insight into how this world works! The training chapters don't feel out of place and is not some Info dump that you just gloss over. Since this is an AU the dungeon is alive and ever-growing with a confirmed 130+ floors(1000 years ago) from what the Mc parents told him. The novel has some nice references to other anime/manga that some of you old drivers may recognize ,but fear not newbies there was some brave souls who managed to point out exactly where they are from. But in all seriousness this work is seriously well done, with great writing either by characters or the grammar by the author, there is always room to improve no matter which aspect of the story you looking at. My only feedback is the Mc appearance description you could add in just a little more detail about his face and his clothes. But I wish health, luck and inspiration upon you author.
A very big disappointment because all the fun and the enjoyment i felt and expected to have to read the story simply vanish away in one single chapter, one of the firsts chapters that explains all the main character background, at first when he lost all his memories i imagined that we are going to explore them little by little as he go trough the dungeon and levels, and for my very big disappointment all thats fantasy was ruinef by using the gods power, and for your information, the god who established the guild, ouranos, prohibit the use of gods power without his permission, but thats not the main point, the main point is that you just throw out a holl character development, so many chapters, so many fields you could have explore just throw away to just demonstrate how awesome his origins are. I tried to love the story after that because i loved how it started but i couldn't, i have a couple more thinks i didnt much like about this same chapter but they are subjective (mc too op to a degree unimaginable, the strange relation with ais) so it doesn't count
The author wants feedback so he shall have it, I'm on chapter 19 and so far the book is really good, dont mind people saying the pace is slow, to me it is just fine for character development and plot progession. The only advice I feel I should give is to give us some ais pov, I know its her character but she feels like the npc in your party before you do their questline, all she does is follow the mc and only talks when the mc does, but the shopping seen gave me some hope, I dont know what direction you want ais to be so just take my option as what I feel so far. oh also some character pictures would be cool.
Grammar wise itβs fine. Unfortunately the story just strikes me as fairly idk.. childish? Itβs like itβs a shounen novel, but actually written by a 13 year old boy so itβs even more ridiculous. The plot developments feel extremely forced and almost nothing is left up to imagination or is put off until later. Basically everything is force-fed to you in an extremely barebones way, and the writing comes across as more of a summary than an actual story. The only βmysteryβ that you can expect is about the same level as CN novels referring to everything with pronouns βOmg you dont think thats HIM do you?β βYes it must be βThat manβ nobody else could be that strongβ As for the card magic, honestly it seems like most of the time his abilities take precendence over the actual story. I think itβs likely the author decided to write a story with card magic, and chose Danmachi as the world instead of the other way around. Thatβs fine i guess but it just seems like some weirdly fetishized story cuz the author has a Twisted Fate kink. Overall itβs not that good, but itβs webnovel so what can you expect. If you like stories where youβre almost forced to turn your brain off and ingest copious amounts of Xanax to enjoy, then this might be the book for you
