Reviews of Carefree Path of a Wondering Stranger
Carefree Path of a Wondering Stranger
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It has some potential but I'm just gonna state everything I think Is wrong with this fanfic 1. It lacks realisticness like this man is doing stuff beyond human capabilities yet they keep saying he dosent have a quirk also they dont question him bringing yachiru to school at all 2. Your writing is to clumped up together you need to space some of it apart and do punctuation I recommend grammarly it's a app that would help you alot 3. All his abilities and spirits are too much especially If bleach fans read this I think you should give more detail and explain each spirit and abilities like I am and anime only fan for bleach So I dont know anything about ywache yet and hollow black so it would be nice if you could explain the abilities in detail 4. I think the mc personality is lacking and too care free so I think if you make him more aggressive it would be better So this is all I have for you if you fix these things it would be golden
I will be honest I was liking the story, when I saw the tags I thought maybe this won't be a harem, and how wrong I was, in the end, harem is just not my cup of tea. If you don't mind the harem the give it a try, I think it is worth at least that much. Author I won't keep reading but I wish you all the best!
To be honest, I didn't like the job. Like why ask for the power of Yahweh and not use them. Alo world "My Hero Academy" is a weak world, mc should already be the strongest there. And his interactions with the characters are just awful, almost no full-fledged dialogue. And when the author told us his background, I was expecting a cold mc, and here he answers everyone with such a friendly
Am giving you 5 * but to be honest am very disappointed π in you on the way you develop the story D I S A P P O I N T E D πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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A good story idea, being a hero with yhwach abilities, but it became boring because there are no interactions at all. Everything about training. He went to training and then trained. He went to school. He fought and took second place and returned to training. There is no talk that makes a realistic story, no reactions, nothing. Moved straight to the next fight. We didn't see anyone's response. Briefly contains many loopholes that would have made a great story. You probably didn't want to make connections because he would leave the world. So what's the point of watching if we don't have fun? You should do your best to make the story realistic and believable before you do. Anything
One of the major problems I have with the MC is that the author tagged the novel as having SelfishMC but he keeps saving people time and time again when he has nothing to gain from it. Selfish - (of a person, action, or motive) lacking consideration for other people; concerned chiefly with one's own personal profit or pleasure. "I joined them for selfish reasons".
Honestly one of the best system in the MHA world fanfictions coz the mc was OP everyone knew he was OP but they still tried to look down on Jim coz he was quirk less which I found realistic. The only reason that I only gave it a 4π in story development was that the mc made a big speech about him clawing his was from the bottom to survive and save the child he picked up but didn't even consider saving eri ahead of time.
Overall Rating: Subpar/average fanfic which could've been better if the pacing isn't too rushed and too many skills with lack of MC development & interaction which resulted to poor story progression that created tons of plot holes. Still, kudos to author-san for having less to no mistake grammatical errors and good English vocabulary. xD
The story suffers from feeling rushed with jist how thr lack of description is shown. The first chapter atleastbdescribedbwhatbwas happening but the next chapters felt rushed, like a friend trying to explain something but really telling everything. The main character is pretty bland even for someone described as carefree. He should show atleast some interesting personality but nothing. Yachiru also doesn't add much but just be there for women to get close to Yhwach. It jist further makes the romance rushed. Everything else is just unlrealistic in a logical sense. The way on how some characters just act feels like what they are doing just doesn't make sense.
