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I show no enthusiasm and puts forth a half-hearted effort to everything/everyone that doesn't pique my interest, but it's more of a dreamy, laid back approach rather than sheer laziness.
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mate, youva' done a hela lota job for this one the only problem is the stability of your update. if you are lacking motivation or inspiration go read a couple of failed FF of the fics you were trying to portray so you'll learn its faults/curves and avoid it ;)
A transmigrated MC with wide knowledge of NarutoVerse (Anime/Manga) with OP OP devil fruit ability.A highly functioning individual as he trained both his physical, mental & chakra since being aware of his new world.Several grammatical errors which can be improved on & it doesn't affect the story or MC progression.Lack of his previous life knowledge &or NarutoVerse utilization and a bit naive for my tastes as he is aware of what dangers lurks in the shadow but still moved with the flow.The exploration of his DF ability isn't being utilize or/isn't being discussed.Word count is too little as well as upload of each chapters which doesn't match the potential of the FF (Above Average), mayhaps, a tactic author-san uses to encourage Patreon (Please be advised that having an established route or known works first is a must before going exclusive which you lack unfortunately).
Above average if you can persists some gram errors &or interactions.Timeline/Year isn't clear. My assumptions is at the early stages of House of Dragon timeline (King Jaehaerys).MC is a transmigrated to Androw Farman with 3 perks/blessing (Ability to tame dragons, Cold weapons proficiency/comprehension & Quasi immortality) the perks aren't informative enough wether he can tame morethan 1 dragons, long life span or hi speed regeneration &or melee or ranged weapons as well.MC is aware enough of the incoming disasters/dangers which is good. MC is highly functional as he trains both his physical & mental capabilities. MCs persona is also an additional boon as he is chaotic-neutral/good which is apt for HOTD/ASOIAF World.There several grammar lapses which can be improved on via proof reading, use of grammar corrective apps/progs &or English dictionary.The story & MC progression are average to fast phased which is quite good to avoid info dumps and have us readers more entertained.Upload of chapter is very slow phased as it seems author-san isn't used to it yet as well as word counta are too low.The world of Planetos (HOTD/ASOIAF) isn't develop or explored yet as we are still in the early stages.
MC is an SI from our earth (which means, aware of several FF's &/or comics/movie/tv/novel series of several stories that include DCVerse)MC is too indecisive/lame. Lack of willpower & intuitive mind even though he has perfect recall and forges mutant power. Too afraid of changing plots due to author lack of creativeness Story itself is a slice of life style of writing & too much info dump (slow MC & story progression). Lack of utilisation of his previous life knowledge & experiences.The story itself lacks author creativity & based on the reviews itself a possibility that author deletes negative reviews.Author has the guts to create a Patreon even though the story/FF itself is like a batman origins side story which is quite laughable xD
Below Average (I don't recommend)WQ (3/5): Several grammar lapses that can be fix. I refer using gramarly app/prog or reading English dictionary to broaden your vocabulary.SD (1/5): Poor portrayal of returning back in time as he didn't do shit and still abide in the canon timeline. No changes whatsoever as he treats himself as a side character or observer.CD (1/5): Lack of characterization; as the old saying goes "age comes with wisdom" which wasn't utilize or even use in this FF especially OG kakashi/MC.US (3/5): Below average speed of update that matches the quality of this FF.WB (1/5): No changes or addition to NarutoVerse, same everything and no additional exploration of the ninja world.
Evaluation: Below AverageWQ: Multiple gramm errors which can be improved on. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process (pertaining to the original story). 2/5SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 3/5CD: MC is a transmigrate/reincarnate but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. Author-san is too scared to damage the storyline nor plot. MC is too passive as there are tons of ways to vilify the elder councils or decision of Hokoge but still refrain from doing so. His foreknowledge & earth/previous life experiences is wasted. 2/5US: Chapters are short, stability of update isn't up to speed. 2/5WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
I was expecting either dark(teach) or gravity (fujitora) xD
Evaluation: Subpar.WQ: Multiple gramm errors which can be improved on. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. 3/5SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 2/5CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. MC is like a stupid Naruto with hero complex no kill rule which is the frustrating part as we all know what a NINJA world is. Lacks utilization of NarutoVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5US: Chapters are short, stability of update is up to speed compared to the quality of this FF. 3/5WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
kudos! for a very well made translation compared to other translators or mtls. iIhighly commend giving this story a try as it's one of the Chinese FF's that bore no resemblance to their racial discrimination, lustful/arrogant young masters, an MC who knows how to stay low whilr still weak and take advantages of every opportunity based on his knowledge about BTTH ;)
Writing Quality is good enough as it has less grammatical errors compared to other FFs in this site Story Development isn't that established as it has no foundation because author-san is just following plot, nothing more nothing less. Character Design is a bit confusing due to his 3rd wish which copies other abilities which in turn lacks the utilization of each skill he copies. MC is a hypocrite as well, he kills and acts like a antihero but then acts like a hero and follows avenger and shield with their no kill policy which in turn will bite their asses in the long run Update stability is enough for this kind of crackfic. World background has potential but wasn't utilized well.
Genius! that was worth the wait ;) that kinda hypocrisy is at its finest xD
Author-san kindly replace the tag for 'antihero' to either 'antagonist/villain' as the MC & his current progress made toward the villainous route rather than than a heroic character without conventional charm. AntiVillain - a villain with a redeeming feature. AntiHero - is a heroic character without the conventional charms. They might do the right thing, but mostly out of self-interest
Update as of Ch.60~ - Great work with the corrections made in your work showing less to no mistake grammatical errors since last I reviewed it. - Sadly, story development & plot progression is still lacking (Abysmally slow). Too many info dumps which are too redundant (too focused on word count). - MC's development & characterization is slowly progressing starting with chapter 40 (but still too many POV's) which is kinda bothering & less engaging. - Update stability isn't up to par based on the quality of this FF. (Subpar but potential gem). - Still lacking of world progression even though there are tons of elements that can be explored (e.g. Inhuman, Mutant, MCU & comics) which is a bummer. - Try to lessen your info dumps and don't focus too much on word count. Lessen your pride and listen to the reviews and try to cope up with intellectual and creative criticism which would help you immensely in figuring out your own type of writing. don't be too stubborn and firmly stand on your belief as it shows your lack of adaptability. Keep on moving forward and strive to be a better version of yourself. Kudos! for still persisting and not giving up on this FF.
Gem/Superb 4/5 - A high commendation for a well written and engaging fanfic. I highly recommend proofreading as i have noticed only slight improvement when it comes to the repeated gramm errors or you may try grammarly app. 5/5 - Non-canon compliant and 3Sanin/S. Hatake era. Your scribbles as well as plot changes you made to NarutoVerse schematics are well made which improved plot and stoey progression. It is also a plus since you have less to zero info dump. 5/5 - MC (AntiHero) is an SI reincarnate that has rich knowledge/experience in NarutoVerse as well as real life killings. MC was able to utilize his previous life experiences & foreknowledge of NinjaWorld. MC is a bit OP and has basic system with only acheivement rewards, all nature chakra, bloodline/chakra absorption & unlimited potential which were well placed and isnt abused as he trains his ass to the utmost without depending too much on his wishes. A chaotic-neutral persona which is apt for NarutoVerse. 4/5 - Update is a bit slow which is understandable as author-san has too many projects & focus more on quality over word count/quantity. 5/5 - Its a plus as author-san delves deeper into other villages other than konoha and bloodline explorations. Opinion: Avoid overlooking important plot changes and development to make it more entertaining and broaden the horizon of MC as well as avoid the regular plotholes and to always keep us on our toes.
Evaluation: Subpar (Could've Gem potential). WQ: Multiple gramm errors which can be improved on. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. (We already knew what WW2 history is). 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster plus author-san focuses too much on word count wherein he added too much world & US literature which most of us are already aware of (Real life & FF style). 3/5 CD: MC is an OC-transmigrator which doesn't lack MervelVerse knowledge (No golden finger). MC persona is Chaotic-neutral which is apt for MarvelVerse. Lacks utilization of MarvelVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5 US: kinda boring as it is just a repeat of history which we are already aware of. Lacks creativeness and too indecisive to create new plot. 3/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 My Opinion: Lessen your history teacher style as it is kinda annoying plus your forced insertion of plot doesn't do any justice. keep it short and simple and be descicive enough to create new plot. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD