As expected of Shesmu, very impressive. Easily one of the best story in this website and it's not even an exaggeration. I have already read the first version and thoroughly enjoyed it. This rewrite makes the first version look like a child's scribble. The characters, the actions, the tragedy, the drama, everything is woven so perfectly. 5 stars do no give justice to this masterpiece.
I have read all the 5 chapters posted so far. A game and then the main character is taken back 10 years. In the process his wife and daughter are gone. The story is interesting, I am awaiting more chapters. Hopefully, the reason as to why and how he gets to go back 10 years will be detailed in the coming chapters. The writing quality is good, the story is developing nicely, character design is good and the world background is well designed. All the best.
Though, it's too early to write a review, I will write one to be reviewed later. The writing quality is exctional. The characters are relatable and likeable. The storyline is developing nicely. The worldbuilding of gamelit/litrpg, despite not my forte, is done quite good. Personally, I think the chapters are extremely long. All in all, great read so far 👍
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