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Good story but a bit of a pacing issue for me. Its 40 chapters in and mc still did not meet Jasmine. It's fine since hes setting down the background but I wish all his cultivation chapters and dragon god trial were cut down to sentences. I came here to see progress of mc, rather than having a chapter explaining him cultivating. Though I do appreciate the time skips, just need a few more of those.
I hope you can keep a small harem, be selective, do not include anyone. Do not include mediocre characters like, Chu Yuechan, Cang Yue, little Aunt. Only one request, you choose at the end. It is good that you train your bird, that you get him a powerful bloodline, as long as it makes sense, do not come out with the fact that he is the descendant of a kind of invented god, better to get him the blood of the phoenix. I like it so far, good job.
riting Quality: 5 Stability of Updates: 1 Story Development: 1 Character Design: 3 World Background: 4 Great story, great writing, great plot but absolute trash Author and trash pacing It's barely readable with mc being so extremely slow that he's not even able to compete against average disciples in his cultivation speed It's so trashy that I cannot get past ch40 without quitting, it's just too damn slow
Writer, plz don't drop this story; take time but complete this story. For this got more interesting than the original. Story style, background, character development is perfect. I think most of the reader of the same opinion. It's a request to you to complete this story. I hope you consider this reader's opinion.
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