Comments of chapter undefined of ASOIAF: Dimensional Chat Group
ASOIAF: Dimensional Chat Group
Servant_Ambrosius
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So weak but can hold the sky? Yea..... I just don't believe it. It's not believable enough. Too many contradictions, irregularities. One or two you can ignore, more even when spread out and you like the story, so many in so few chapters, in an obvious attempt to push the plot in a certain direction, or force it to go as canon. It's just not a good story when all I see is plot tools used badly ignoring the build up. Your MC, from... 15 chapters ago? Would probably go on a training montage or another world before going against fully capable gods and Titans.
That’s the effect of it being a Dimensional Group Chat fic. You can’t realistically foreshadow or set up every conflict considering the other characters that matter are all from different universes.
Iceyunderground:The irregularities, or how I would put it, the feeling of randomness that's going on. Maybe it's just me, maybe it's not, but the overall 'flow' of the story just feels weird or a bit random to me. I'm not great at really explaining stuff, so that's really the best I can do to clarify things.
Y'know, considering what holding up the sky represents in Greek Myth, handing it over to a Fey is literally the worst thing they could've done right? Metaphysical representation means a LOT in the Riordanverse, and you literally just gave the metaphysical representation of power to a Fey of all things - You literally handed all the power under the sky from the pantheon back to natural law.
