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I'm happy with my work! It's very good! If you disagree, you're just wrong! (for legal reasons this is a joke) But anyway, if you have criticisms and things you think that are better changed, this is the prime time to voice it! The novel's short enough so I can actually fix stuff easily! (but please don't think I'll do anything you ask of me!) When the novel becomes too long, I'll never change anything ever so don't lose your chance!
I'm making this when chapter 128 is out. The characters and world of this book feel so alive, each with a backround and personality you can really feel. The world is really thought and fleshed out. The quality is consistent and has been good for the whole time. I feel like with more time the novel will become really popular and succeeded as long as the author continues and gives themselves breaks when need be. I look forward to the progression of this book and would highly recommend it as one of the best reads on this site. I know my review doesn't do justice for this but I hope it will atleast help persuade ppl to read!
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Your writing quality is superb. I love the way you describe the characters. The fact that he has a debt to pay and that his debtor's sold him reminded me of how brutal some debtor's are. The synopsis is short, but straight to the point and I like that. Overall, a great job considering it's only 8 chapters. All the best, author!
This is awesome! The writing quality is great. It was flawless. There were so many lines that could be made as quotes. The way Lorn sees life is on point. I loved where the story began. The story was developed in a way that could attract readers immediately. Since it's a video game-related novel, we can expect a very good world development as the story progress. Also, Lorn is pretty much an attractive character. It was a good read for me. I have already added this to my library and will continue reading to know what will happen to Lorn in the future. Keep up the good work author! I wish you the best of luck!