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Ultimatedaywriter

Ultimatedaywriter

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I like mixing different genres together in my stories.

2018-09-26 JoinedUnited States
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter10d
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    I like that it tells the reader that the entity in the prologue is a straight up god. It reminds me of some of the Greek myths about Artemis who knew her domains just after birth. Its a good story and worth a read.

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    Galaxy's First Ruler
    Fantasy · Hand_Number_37
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter18d
    Replied to Cory_Travis

    I have no intention of adding that

    Lex stared at the three genin that were supposed to guard him on his way to wind country. The entire team were women; all ninjas were in this world. By their wide eyes and giddiness for their first C-rank mission he could extrapolate they were fresh out of the academy. That would make their ages 18 or 19 depending on how long their Jonin sensei made them wait before their first C rank.
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    Kunoichi Vs Furries
    Anime & Comics · Ultimatedaywriter
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter18d
    Replied to

    what's that?

    Lex stared at the three genin that were supposed to guard him on his way to wind country. The entire team were women; all ninjas were in this world. By their wide eyes and giddiness for their first C-rank mission he could extrapolate they were fresh out of the academy. That would make their ages 18 or 19 depending on how long their Jonin sensei made them wait before their first C rank.
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    Kunoichi Vs Furries
    Anime & Comics · Ultimatedaywriter
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I like the mythology and the battle between light and dark. The creation of lesser gods it resembles a lot of Greek mythology. The premise is good and so is the execution.

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    Re: Monster King
    Fantasy · UNK
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    This is just tip me over. My story nuclear fusion cultivator is about revenge, the effects of new techniques, and a alternate earth with cultivation and it.

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    Nuclear Fusion Cultivator
    Fantasy · Ultimatedaywriter
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    It was difficult to follow at first but I understand the gist of it. A man dies and is taken to an alternate world where he gains a system. This system is demanding and requires a lot of practice before he get anything from it. All in all a good start for a series.

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    My System And I
    Fantasy · Mel_Aniv
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I liked it. The grammar is good not a lot of errors maybe one punctuation error. I like the concept of drinking some tea and gaining understanding of magic. As for the mystery of how she fits in that world, it's a good concept.

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    Not Applicable/Redacted
    Fantasy Romance · J_Writing
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I liked it, the arrow shooting through the window to kill a wolf would pounce showed that the hunter had a lot of skill. I didn't think that it was hard to follow some parts did confuse me but they were clarified later.

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    Work has been licensed to Popink
    Fantasy Romance · Proteety_Promi
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    It has a lot of potential and is well written. Noe an autistic child born to a mother who doesn't have the ability to deal with him is sent away. This used to happen to many children who were born Autistic. The world is interesting so far and has four deaths in the first couple of chapters. I can't wait to see of Noe develops into a hero or a villain.

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    Devil Child
    LGBT+ · SEP1A
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Replied to Kotik_Kotik

    Dude Geek not Greek you know like Beowolf's people.

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    Nuclear Fusion Cultivator
    Fantasy · Ultimatedaywriter
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    First great cover and synopsis. Both were phenomenally done. It seems be a classic boy meets girl, with the possibility of some fish out of water situations. It sounds like fun.

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    The Beloved Child of God
    Fantasy Romance · Mikazuki_Sora
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I like the story and the linear power progression. The reset to a phenomenon is really great. While most would set a save point this takes that control out of the protag's hands. The world ending scenario is my jam.

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    Tale of an Absolute God
    Fantasy · boryz
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Commented

    A better word than qualitative would be exponential. It describes the jump in power better. Keep up the good work this is a great power system and easy to understand.

    Next is the rank of Gold, but in this situation it is a qualitative change from the lower ranks.
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    Tale of an Absolute God
    Fantasy · boryz
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    Romance isn't really my thing but the writing was good. The mystery is enough of a hook to keep me reading. The characters are very real and down to earth. Sometimes that's a breath of fresh air between the reality ending gaming systems and grinding to level infinity.

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    Don't Let Me Down.
    Contemporary Romance · shirley_amengor
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    It's well written and well edited. The beginning starts with just the right amount of action and the bully scene was classic. Snitching does often end with worse bullying especially in today's age. Over all a good start.

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    Pages Apart
    Fantasy · Mediocre_author
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    The classic evil protagonist. A good relatable tale of how the little injustices slowly drive a man to evil. The injustice of an unfair world eventually drives the protag into a realization. There are no morals we made them up. That's what I got from it.

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    Demonic Requiem: The Epitome of Evil
    Magical Realism · RavineAbyss
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I like the premise, there aren't as many chapters as I would like back in weight. Everyone likes psycho royalty. As for the characters, I did like them.

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    The Bloody Angel
    Teen · Theblue_wings
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    I like the premise and it is very interesting. The pace is very quick, which I like. Nothing is perfect, the tenses do change from past to present. But that's about the only gripe I have.

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    The Devil and the Huntsman
    Fantasy · MicahDarkFantasy
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter1mth
    Posted

    Ok, it does need editing and some proof reading. Its a great start with a clear and concise plot. I do like the suicide mission at the beginning, Though, it does need to be fleshed out more.

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    "A Wish Of Lazy Otaku"
    Fantasy · Abysalyounglord
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  • Ultimatedaywriter
    Ultimatedaywriter3mth
    Replied to berserkbarath008

    Knights use paige squire knight and knight captain from what I gathered. My original plan was to use US Marine terms but Jon hasn't had any contact with a group like that. So I used what he knew. He knows of fighters teachers and students or in this case recruits. He's using the term recruit to distance himself from the responsibility of taking a true student.

    "Wrong your name is recruit Mill until you quit or become a fighter. Now go over there and punch the fucking rock." The boy turned and began walking. He raced over to the boulder and froze at the sight of it. "Do any of you recruits want to punch the rock instead of recruit Mill?" The boys and even some of those in their late teens didn't say a word. Jon scanned over the crowd and felt more furious than his act allowed. With a sucked in breath, he roared at the crowd. "Then I hope the lot of you are well rested and dressed for the weather. We're going on an adventure. The lot of you are going to march with me until dawn if no one volunteers."
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    Game of Dragon Ball
    Book&Literature · Ultimatedaywriter
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