YeshuaH
The classic reincarnation/transmigration story that tugs at your heartstrings. The author does a great job of setting up the premise and MC's characters, establishes his relations with his family, with lots of show instead of telling. The emotional core of the story is set up very strongly, and so are the characters, especially the MC. And then the fun part starts. If you like system/litRPG/transmigration stories, you will definitely gonna wanna read this. Very few typos and grammatical errors that can be easily corrected with simple editing. Highly recommendation and will stay in my library, so that I can keep following it. Thank you, author.
Get me some new tear ducts. My old ones broke down. Although the writing quality is great, the thing that stood out most is the emotion. Miguel is relatable and funny at times, and has his own flashbacks and backstories, but what I'm talking about is the PAIN. I felt it slam into me like a truck and I wanted to cry. The start is a bit slow, but that's ok. It's all important to the plot. I love the meaning behind Gaby's name and the obvious thought and/research author put into creating this book and giving each character life. Although I'm just at the part mc gets his new life, I can already tell this story is progressing beautifully. It all flows really well. Never lose that touch to connect readers with the characters, author. Good luck!
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I really like how you build up the tension within the story. I think the description of the characters and background could use some work. I'd like to envision what is happening and the setting. The story development seems solid. I notice that you use a video game style to describe certain parts of the story, which is a common Web novel tactic. People seem to like it, so I have nothing bad or good to say about it. Keep up the good work. But please add some more description to the story.