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I love op mc trope but that also have to have a plot..... This story so far even though have good plot points still have some problems... Like what happened to bruce since he was effectively non hulk at that point and was captured by ross he jumped from the chopper and almost died to become hulk..... Just add hulk in previous chs so that plot hole can be fixed. Great read so far
I never publish reviews criticizing errors in grammar because I hardly know how to read the English language, much less write it (I write this with the help of the translator). But this time I will make an exception since the story is very difficult to read even for me, there are several sentences in a single paragraph so it is difficult to know who says each sentence; There are also cases where quotation marks are omitted in each dialogue, making it difficult to follow the conversations between the characters. As for the plot of the story, the truth is not clear to me, since from the beginning it is revealed that the mc in his strongest transformation can fight against OAA, so maybe he will only be the nanny of the Avengers. Something about the story that I found completely unnecessary is that the author took 5 CHAPTERS to describe the scene where Thor infiltrates the SHIELD base to retrieve mjolnir. Hopefully the author will take the trouble to fix these errors. (Google translate)
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I won't say this is a good novel, it have no good devlopment nor character design and there are many plot holes...But I can assure i enjoy the read..and thats what I look for a fanfic, it doesn't necessarily need to have a great story, if it has then its good,, but this is the type you just enjoy without a care in the world..
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Definitely quite interesting and intriguing with OC/MC being the older brother of Thor and Loki not to mention being friends with Jesus as well TOAA not to mention Laufey being afraid of him not just that but of what he is the God of as well being the strongest of all Asgardians overall enjoyed reading this book and the plot that is going on look forward to reading more of this book and cant wait for when ur able to get the chance to continue on with this book
Hey Author! I noticed you didn't have a book cover. You gotta have one, it helps with viewership. When people see a novel without a cover they think less chapters or already dropped. Here's a pic I found online if you're interested! I like your style, my only critique is that you kinda ensured a serious lack of tension when you made him a nigh omnipotent being from the start, but maybe that's the point.