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Now that I read it again, this is amazing work. But I’ve seen some mistakes that are huge. Author, I cannot change your mind but I do sincerely hope you’ll change your mind lol. Don’t make Jin-Woo talk a lot when he fights!! He’s literally silent fighter. He’s not the type type to talk when fighting. Only when he‘s done fighting then he talks. I’m just saying. I’ve read solo leveling so many times. He’s just not that type.
Can't deny that there were better ways to go about it in the Smoker fight. Welp, the plan is to not to do that from now on cuz it is kind of repetitive and redundant
DarkSeid:Ermm, I already understood that was a necessity if it was only Arlong’s part. But what about Smoker? You can’t just say he was buying time for the Luffy and others to escape. I know that was exact reason why but still. How many times are you gonna do that? In the end, this is all amazing fanfic and I’m definitely still gonna read it. It would just much better if you manage to make him not talk a lot later on.
Desculpa vou falar em "Português" vai ter que usar Google Tradutor xD Achei muito bom autor, não sei oque você poderia melhorar pois não sou um especialista mas a luta foi "quase" completamente fluída. Só faltou algo como uma interação das pessoas ao fundo durante a luta, por exemplo um pensamento ou fala do Zoro e do Sanji "durante" a luta do MC mas também antes do clímax da luta.