Comments of chapter undefined of One Piece: Lost Monarch
One Piece: Lost Monarch
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Now that I read it again, this is amazing work. But I’ve seen some mistakes that are huge. Author, I cannot change your mind but I do sincerely hope you’ll change your mind lol. Don’t make Jin-Woo talk a lot when he fights!! He’s literally silent fighter. He’s not the type type to talk when fighting. Only when he‘s done fighting then he talks. I’m just saying. I’ve read solo leveling so many times. He’s just not that type.
Well, I do agree with you there. Jin Woo doesn't talk that much, he is someone who would go for the throat first before speaking anything. But here is the thing, in this moment, he knew he was no match for Arlong, and so was only acting, trying to rile him up and lure him into the trap. He said all those things so arlong would lose his short temper and don't notice his plan. Again, it is something that I wasn't able to show properly
Desculpa vou falar em "Português" vai ter que usar Google Tradutor xD Achei muito bom autor, não sei oque você poderia melhorar pois não sou um especialista mas a luta foi "quase" completamente fluída. Só faltou algo como uma interação das pessoas ao fundo durante a luta, por exemplo um pensamento ou fala do Zoro e do Sanji "durante" a luta do MC mas também antes do clímax da luta.
