Tento
just read half the chapter but wtf is this super fast transition? Even bullets wouldn't fly fast as this story lmao. confessing, getting rejected, realization, drowning in sorrow, turning into fat ****, one year skip and getting bullied, promising to get revenge , getting fit from fat... literally with in few paragraphs.. I'm scared to read further.
Can see the potential in this. Peoblem is, people/writers sometimes forget that there's a free web app to fix grammar issues. Heck, if you want to paraphrase something, there's even a web app for that. I'll keep reading this until the end, I hope it gets better or at least more enjoyable to read. Sorry for Bitching about grammar when I'm still in (technically) the first chapter of the novel. Hope I didn't rub you the wrong way.