Comments of chapter undefined of Rise of the White Dragon

This is becoming more and more interesting as the chapters keep coming out. Please keep up the good work.

It is nice to see Ingrid and Christina accepted into the family

I'd only really say to make sure to think about the content but also never think about overly dragging out the story either... there always needs a form of sync between content and pace, can't that be done, the story will either become boring or it will become too fast...

I alone thought that the mother would ask how she met her son?

I'm not a writer so my comment may be hypocritical but the conversations feel a little stale. maybe a better way to say it is plastic. I know new writers tend to have problems with this I was just commenting in case you haven't noticed and was wondering how do you improve this? ive wondered while reading how hard it would be to write a smooth flowing conversation but since I haven't tried I don't know how hard the process would be to improve the conversations to make them more lifelike but I was wondering about your thoughts as a writer about the difficulty of trying to improve this part of writing that to me seems very important to grab readers interest and keep them immersed in the novel

this novel is a work of art, you have to make more, you just have to

Another ⚡◽ dropped, (🔥 W 🔥) 👍 Just asking what are your plans for the novel: a) At what chapter will premium start? b) At what chapter will the cataclysm/apocalypse descend? (estimated) c) Is your draft already solidly cemented or are you still fixing things up or in this case accepting ideas? Thank you and have a nice day.

Thanks for the chapter

I really like where this story is going (have it in my library), I do wish the relationship developed already but its realistic. its her first love and he old (mentally). Im looking forward to future chapters.

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Thanks 😊

love the story

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Thanks for the chapter 👍❤️

Thanks for the chapter

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thx

nice chapter