Mike_Lu
Alright the two things I have a problem is story development and character design. MC really showed and shared his power with his "sister" smh. Mostly because if Hermione from the future that's already a big cheat. (She was the greatest witch of their generation) But he decides to help her? What if she turns against him one day? Remember this Hermione is from the future where she died. And she used to live as a only child and probably doesn't see MC as a "brother" so she would most likely kill him. Also MC is too trusting. Ik for a fact if someone like Hermione went through a war and died her "morals" would have dimmed down by a lot. So yeah if mc didn't help Hermione and stop acting so naive I would give this a story a 5/5.
Low Quality Trash. Simp, Wimp, Moron MC. Sl*tty sister. Sharing power for no reason. Ppl who says he is getting occlumency in return are idiots. MC has a copy ability. He could have got any power from anyone. The biggest error of the author is making him a granger. Most ppl literally hates hermione, this includes me. Some ppl does not like muggleborns in potterverse as they are simply refugees of wizarding world. They act like Muggle world is a fairy tale, everything is perfectly balanced and asks noble lines of purebloods to bend over for them. So if your target readers are kids go with muggleborn/pro-muggle heroic characters who gives freebies to everyone. If your target readers are adults go with pureblood mc and make him SMART not santa. Be a villain and/or anti-hero.
well nothing to say, this story itself is a sucide from the start, there is no research into what the mc is doing,i mean one who has a psychologist guide can't even think correctly, everything is happening in the wimps of God a.k.a. writer. and so far no improvement in his writing or story or characters. so readable with passion but no interest present in it. if there was some comedy, a hanky panky stuff between them but in a line or proper phasing it can be better. please improve it and write a better story.
So far so good. The Mc add on actually didn't change much and with him only starting to have access to Hogwarts, so he's quite weak right now. I hope to see Mc add more info and knowledge inside his system with the help of ROR.. Maybe author could make it so ROR can produce any type of books and knowledge in past and present? Muggle and magical, both side of it.. Like wishing with ROR "Books and knowledge that I haven't read yet. "...