SmileSBeMr137
Kinda my personal preference but the story might be better if the mc was cold/ruthless or lazy *just trying to live peacefully* because it fit the title more. I first thought it was gonna be like the third party going to either steal power or disrupting the storyline of the world *cold/ruthless/selfish path* or try to stay away from the main character as much as possible and live peacefully *lazy/comedy/acting cool path* While the goal “helping myself by helping other” is good and all but it doesn’t fit the title and thumbnail. Might be better to just call it “Supporting the Main Character” i think there a novel with that name tho. The mysterious past of the MC is also weird, it doesn’t fit the MC. Idk what the past is but it usually have to do with bad thing like being bullied, murdered, ignored, etc... and if it’s any of this then the MC usually would not be the cheerful type. Also since this novel is about going world to world then it’s better not to give too much detailed background info. The fact that he started as a toddler is too boring, take too long and unnecessary Keep in mind, most of these are personal preference so...meh don’t worry about this review if you disagree.
I was a bit cringe at the beginning seeing that It's the same introduction to the other Isekai Manga/Novel I read, specially with OP Ability that was received from a God/Goddess/Entity, but the plot changed my view of the story, sure he is a bit arrogant and clumsy like the other Isekai Mc I know but how he adapts and how he follows what he aspires to be is what made him different from the rest. keep up the good work and keep writing dude, this is a really great book.
Fouth wall breaks are everywhere and annoying, definitions on whats happening is excessive but only non useful info that we dont need. Keeps putting stuff like *slaps his forehead* which is really annoying and unnecessary you dont need to put the star signs and you dont need to keep making the characters actions over excessive and skips important info like what happen when kin fell in chap 5, you also skipped alot about the characters and their personalities. Also you could just write it like this. Ken was talking to the white ball, when suddenly his parents walked into his room. But soon Ken realized that his parents couldnt see the white ball of light and immediately calmed down. He then asked the ball of light “They can’t see you?” the ball of light then replied “ Yes, your are the only one who can see me.” Ken was surprised by this and soon became curious as to how. Or Ken then spotted a light in the distance and realized it was the same kind of light he saw when he first met Will, Ken then realized that it was another important character and became excited. When Ken made it to the character and realized it was a girl and injured he became worried, so he and his father who was also running beside him helped the girl back to his house via teleportation along side Will.