Xshamee
Firstly, I only made it to chapter 5. I Must say that you did well on writing this fic, but. It wasn't for me, for starter's, it was Very very uncharacteristic for Ainz to do most of the things he did on the chapters that I have seen so far. And as far as I know Ainz is a Very Very cautious person bordering paranoia. So yeah that's that. Secondly, the way he thinks and interact. that's what bothers me the most, as you have said in the early chapter that he has "Conquered" the new world. But he Acts as if he hadn't Conquered anything before, like he doesn't show the Overlord like ruler he is. instead he has this disconnect with his Overlord self, and from what I have read on the LN of Overlord, he has Fully accepted his Overlord self. And mind you he hasn't even completed his Conquest in the new world, but he already accepted his human self and his Overlord self. but in this fic it's a mess when you compare it to the current Ainz of the LN and this fic Ainz. thirdly, I just genuinely dislike the way you're portraying him as a Subservient of sort in this Fic. I just don't ever see Ainz going that low. btw I think I've seen this fic before in Fanfiction. don't know why I get the feeling like I've read it before, anyways it was a good run for me, sadly it's just not for me. I hope this Review doesn't offend you in any way, if it do I apologise. have a nice day ^^/
ok imma be truthfull i wabted to give .a one star review because you totally destroyed everything ainz is and that is something i dont really tolerate anyway but i cant because youre grammar is good updating stability decent and world background acceptable anyway you now know my real opinion about this book
Okay so this novel for me isn't great as I love overlord and this isn't that. Everyone saying oh but he was human and if you take away nazarick etc then he was a nice guy. Yes, he may be... however, we at least I didn't watch the show because he was a nice guy. I watched it because he was a badass, he had nazarick, his servants etc. Basically, if you like cannon Ainz you won't like this story. He is a beta good guy... completely breaking his character tbh.
Dang, this **** is really good!! Now there's some who understands me!!! after all those years of searching some fate series that's actually good, now here it is!!! A GODDAMN GOOD FANFIC!!! AAHAHAHA!!!! But to be honest, though, I would like to see Ainz and Shirou fights. fighting for Sakura. Will the hero wannabe ****er I going to win? Or is it the Overwhelmingly Overpowered God of Death? .. .. Well, even if you don't do that, THIS SHIT IS STILL MOTHER FUCKING AWESOME!!!!!
Author nothing offensive but it really is difficult to read, it feels weird but I can't quite point it out. there are quite some unnecessary things, and the structure is, well, sorry to be blunt 'meh', It feels like google translated but with little Grammarly. If you read ncode stories, then you'll understand what I mean, Rough structure. Your content is interesting but hard to understand. But your writing style and structure did improve exponentially since the beginning. But don't worry about it much, it will come with experience. Keep up the good works, and hopefully, you will take it positively to improve!