Toga
This is... Bad. There's absolutely no actual story to this. All the relationships are superficial. The characters are plain... Trash. The interactions are incredibly unrealistic. The writing and grammar are terrible. Judge for yourself, just keep in mind that there's a reason that all the good reviews read like incoherent ramblings.
Fcking he is human in earth and don't know anything about love?ARE FKING THINGKING WE ARE IDIOT TO BELIVE HE IS FKING DENSE BECAUSE HE IS SAIYAN?just because u want trunkz to born?lol this is kalan story not FKING Goku and Vegeta story please be more smart... FKING i bet u love your lover be NTR before
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I like this story very much. There is nor many dragonball fanfiction in the first place. Make sure to make this one as good as or better than "the strongest legend of dragonball" That story is all good from the start with only a bad part at the end when there are another multiverse story included. Thus, make sure you do better than them. I will be cheering. And please don't be like some fanfiction that you just dropped it halfway and give the reason like wanting to train the writing. Anyway, thank you for the good story.
Writing quality has seriously gone downhill. Ever since the author has added more fanfictions and books on this site the release schedule has been abysmal at 1 chapter perday. Every chapter is just fluff where nothing important happens. Kalan's reduced to a measly side character who's trying to maintain the original story, but the story has already deviated too far from the original to the point where his efforts are futile. I wasn't on board the Bulma train from the get go and reccomended multiple times that he didn't romance Bulma. I don't know why Toga even paired Kalan and Bulma together in the first place if he was just going to Yamcha him. Bulma's excuse for not being together with him is because he trains to much? Lol wait till she finds out how much Vegeta trains, adding on that Vegeta can't make clones of himself. Chapter 130 is my dropping point. It felt like a big FU to my face. An entire chapter dedicated to eating food. It seems like the author is losing interest and this is going to be dropped. I'll revisit on the future to see if his writing has improved, but as of now my review stands. Haowie out!
I QUIT. Wtf man? Everyone wants bulma and kalan but they broke srsly when it drop from 2 chapters everyday to 1-2 chapters everyday i still didn't comment anything about it but kalan and bulma should be together. Kalan even wish eternal youth for bulma whats the use of that now? Your novel is getting good to bad bad to worst it sucks. Just get kalan apologize to bulma and get them back together. This chapter sucks.
To put it simply this is a wish-fulfillment fanfic. The author makes an odd reason to save the Saiyans. With the mc saying something along the line of not all Sayians are evil. The pacing in this story is awful for the timeline; I would be more understanding if it was done at the beginning of Dbz or super, but it's done in the original DB since the mcs plans as said before. Lastly, what ruins it for me is that the system is helping him with everything. Not a guide but everything is due to the system hardly any credit could be given to the mcs strength or intelligence. Cons- Badly written wish fulfillment fanfic Pros- Pretty decent grammar from what I skimmed through. If you don't care for the plot and just care for the powers then this is for you. Overall- 2.7-5
Please don't read this. It's obviously not good due to it being a system-related sub-genre, when the only thing numbers related in dragon ball is the power levels. Which itself was outdated to it's irrelevancy when it came to stronger beings. There's no substance in this, just endless rambling, don't read.
I'm not a fan of dragon ball but definitely am fan of this novel. Author way of explaining things and developing story is easy to understand even for me who only watch DBZ where goku still a kid with tail and power pole. Overall good explanation, great development, good MC, relaxing and serious at the right time. The system is not as much cheat as other novel but still play great role in MC's adventure.