Item: The Chosen one who goes dark
Rating: 1

PrimasLv42mth

2024-08-23 13:30

I think you should stop writing this story because nobody like the character who has no path for redemption you would have been taken the story in whole different way like for example could have given him some kind of love shakal but in a good way so he can be like grey help everybody with the money or anything that he can get from them so he can live with the women or a girl he is not with and she will help him in every kind of way and punish the peoples who had hurt or did anything wrong to him by humility in or anything she will punish those even his family the former one and the darker 12 with this your story would have been a good story but you did not think that so I think you should start doing your story and just don't do anything like this one

The Chosen one who goes dark

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