Here's my honest review. Other than few spelling and grammatical mistakes writting quality and updates are decent. Personally I didn't like the creative freedom you took for creating the lore about angels and stuff. I don't know why you made mc and aura travel with ainz as an adventurer when you could have made him to spy on other countries. Also ainz losing against mc was very underwhelming the fact mc is supposed to be a librarian and made to be a meta build is stupid you know there would have been nothing wrong with mc losing to ainz but the other way around just made the whole thing just too awkward. Did you take inspiration for this fic from yellowness? Because that story has been suffering from stagnation. I wonder what end goals does the mc have as being with nazarick would just be boring and going against nazarick is simply impossible unless you completely mess up the story.
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I appreciate the criticism, also I took those freedoms cause I wanted things to be different, I'm not just gonna copy the og Story, that would be boring A., So I made significant adjustments to give myself Freedom, it also makes sense for Ainz to barely lose, Thoth is optimised for combat, and he is an angel with lots of spells that are effective against Ainz, he also knows what Ainz thinks and what he does in certain situations, even with the debuffs, he would still win. Nonetheless, I will strive to improve. Thank you for your review.
Okay A. Hardly any meaningful changes from canon. At least up til chapter 15 which is as far as I’ve read. It’s basically one of those fics that follow tightly to canon and making minimal changes even with the addition of the mc. 🤷♂️
MarAuthor:I appreciate the criticism, also I took those freedoms cause I wanted things to be different, I'm not just gonna copy the og Story, that would be boring A., So I made significant adjustments to give myself Freedom, it also makes sense for Ainz to barely lose, Thoth is optimised for combat, and he is an angel with lots of spells that are effective against Ainz, he also knows what Ainz thinks and what he does in certain situations, even with the debuffs, he would still win. Nonetheless, I will strive to improve. Thank you for your review.
Author be like: did you not see Ainz wear different color ring? Its such a drastic chance from plot cause I wanted things to be different, I'm not just gonna copy the og Story, that would be boring
CrossCounty:Okay A. Hardly any meaningful changes from canon. At least up til chapter 15 which is as far as I’ve read. It’s basically one of those fics that follow tightly to canon and making minimal changes even with the addition of the mc. 🤷♂️
God is dead, that is a small change, sure, I didn't make a whole new race, I didn't make a whole new floor, and I didn't try to have the story make sense. Yeah, it's just trash, like those Chinese webnovels that are barely coherent. If you hate it so much, why are you still even reading?
CrossCounty:Okay A. Hardly any meaningful changes from canon. At least up til chapter 15 which is as far as I’ve read. It’s basically one of those fics that follow tightly to canon and making minimal changes even with the addition of the mc. 🤷♂️
Im pretty sure they said they weren't anymore.
MarAuthor:God is dead, that is a small change, sure, I didn't make a whole new race, I didn't make a whole new floor, and I didn't try to have the story make sense. Yeah, it's just trash, like those Chinese webnovels that are barely coherent. If you hate it so much, why are you still even reading?
I never said God isnt dead, I just confirmed in a comment that he wasnt all knowing and all powerful and that world items were used to kill him
mow:Im pretty sure they said they weren't anymore.
I was referring to you asking why he didn't just drop the novel, I haven't read the story so I have no idea what you're talking about. 😰
MarAuthor:I never said God isnt dead, I just confirmed in a comment that he wasnt all knowing and all powerful and that world items were used to kill him
Apologies then, sorry if I came on a bit strong, its just that I hate it when people lie, I believe I made more than enough changes for my story to be unique. Hope you like my Fic though! I did my best with it.
mow:I was referring to you asking why he didn't just drop the novel, I haven't read the story so I have no idea what you're talking about. 😰
No worries, was just answering your question and yeah I'll check it out for myself shortly.
MarAuthor:Apologies then, sorry if I came on a bit strong, its just that I hate it when people lie, I believe I made more than enough changes for my story to be unique. Hope you like my Fic though! I did my best with it.
The initial criticism was constructive, but most of the replies on this thread were way out of line. If you don't like the FF then F off and stop flaming the author.
Odil:The initial criticism was constructive, but most of the replies on this thread were way out of line. If you don't like the FF then F off and stop flaming the author.
personally, i got really annoyed by the blatant nerfing of the main character, and that cause me to drop it early on. had promise, but that was almost entirely dependent on not butchering the language and following the original plotline and world building. every change the author made up till the point i dropped was either so minor as to be inconsequential, or just something irritating or illogical. i liked the premise. grammar and spelling wasn't an issue. but the execution kind of fell flat, due to the author's inability to facilitate plot outside of nerfing characters.
