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2024-03-05 14:14

The writing is good, but the formatting could use some reform. Grammar seems to be up to standards for the most part and updates are steady. There is some conflict to keep the audience engaged. I'd like to see a bit more description in terms of the setting, background, visual sense, and whatnot. I invite the author to check out my adventure fanfic "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger (TLV)". It is a spinoff of "Avatar: Macai's Journey (AMJ)". It might help to read the first 1-3 chapters of AMJ first, but I really don't think that's necessary to enjoy this one.

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I will, thank you for your honest review♥

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I can see the potential of this novel, i love it that i can feel the characters emotion and i can tell that there is more to the plot! Wishing for the next update!!!!!!!!!

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I really thought that the update of this novel will be stable, it was fun reading it! I can feel the thrill and somehow wanted to read more!! Will still be waiting for next update thoughhhhhhhh! Love lots dear authorrrrr![img=update]

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