Hi, Sand Kastle here!🏰 (Shamelessly rating my book 5 stars since I like it) Are you looking for a story with an unlimited level-up system that will allow an underdog to evolve into an overpowered figure in the idol industry? If yes, then, this story's for you!
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LIKEthe novel is very good. i am constantly looking for new chapters..............................................................................................................................however, there is something missing. say this, if June was not a thug and just a normal transmigration, would there be any difference in the story. man you have completely obliterated the traits, he should have gained in the process. he should at least have caution and planning. you have said that he was becoming stronger than his boss, he should be one of the best. despite repeated targeting, there is not even a hint of pre planning, if anything goes wrong. he got stabbed, this should have been huge and at least the ex phoenix employee's fate should have been given and at least a paragraph should have been given detailing the police procedures, the arrest of the two including the person that allowed the two on set. moreover, there is his killer present in front of him, i can understand, he cant do anything now and his main target now is to save his sister but at least cautious behavior and the scene of mc planning should have been enough. the expensive things given should have been at least stashed to safety in his own house or even keep it temporarily with choi. being a thug working for money, i assume it would be his nature to protect money or expensive stuff. he could have planned to sell some to upgrade is phone. inner monologues hinting at his future plans while his enemies are in front taunting or faking politeness might be good too.......................................................................................................... the story as i said is very good and i don't expect him to act as a super spy but at least give us something to act as reminder to us of him being a super thug outside of thug like speech and martial arts. his adversary stabbed him but he still takes his potential enemies lightly................................................................................................................................author, please don't take it badly but i believe if these aspects can be improved, it might be better. thank you and waiting for updates.
SandKastle:no romance right now! (i don't think this novel will focus on romance, too). if there will be, it'll be very minimal!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I do want to take these things into consideration: 1. Being in a gang and being an idol is two completely different things (one that June isn't really used to yet). 2. June still hasn't uncovered the truth about Joon-ho's life, and is preoccupied with the survival show. 3. I try to incorporate Jun Hao's "caution and planning" during these targeted attacks, but can only do so much with the current June's knowledge of the situation. 4. Right now, I'm focusing on the idol survival show prospect and would delve into the deeper, more darker, stuff as we go by. However, I do appreciate your critical comment. I will try to incorporate such traits in the upcoming chapters (the ones I haven't written yet), as June will continue to face challenges. Please do note that I am still a rookie in this genre, i.e. fantasy, transmigration, and have a difficult time incorporating such themes. Another thing to note is that I am going for a more comedic route for this novel (as I am still learning how to write serious themes), so take this with a light heart. With your comment, I'll surely try my hardest!
TrackShadow:the novel is very good. i am constantly looking for new chapters..............................................................................................................................however, there is something missing. say this, if June was not a thug and just a normal transmigration, would there be any difference in the story. man you have completely obliterated the traits, he should have gained in the process. he should at least have caution and planning. you have said that he was becoming stronger than his boss, he should be one of the best. despite repeated targeting, there is not even a hint of pre planning, if anything goes wrong. he got stabbed, this should have been huge and at least the ex phoenix employee's fate should have been given and at least a paragraph should have been given detailing the police procedures, the arrest of the two including the person that allowed the two on set. moreover, there is his killer present in front of him, i can understand, he cant do anything now and his main target now is to save his sister but at least cautious behavior and the scene of mc planning should have been enough. the expensive things given should have been at least stashed to safety in his own house or even keep it temporarily with choi. being a thug working for money, i assume it would be his nature to protect money or expensive stuff. he could have planned to sell some to upgrade is phone. inner monologues hinting at his future plans while his enemies are in front taunting or faking politeness might be good too.......................................................................................................... the story as i said is very good and i don't expect him to act as a super spy but at least give us something to act as reminder to us of him being a super thug outside of thug like speech and martial arts. his adversary stabbed him but he still takes his potential enemies lightly................................................................................................................................author, please don't take it badly but i believe if these aspects can be improved, it might be better. thank you and waiting for updates.