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2023-06-01 09:51

I think that the prologue part is totally not needed right now. The way I see it, it can be very eye opening if the prologue part can be used further in the story. otherwise, it's a good book. But I strongly insist that you improve on vocabulary expressions and make the scenes the characters more descriptive.

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I put the prologue there for a reason that will be more understandable later in the story and also I feel the prologue is my hook the prologue was originally fused with my 2nd chapter but I realized it would be more smooth as a prologue but thank you for your review

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and for that last one thanks I realized that and I'm working on it

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