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AngelLily
AngelLilyLv132yr
2021-12-01 22:44

This novel has a lot of potentials and the beginning was quite intriguing. I can already see the author is trying her best with the grammars and I applaud her for that as I could already guess that English ain't her first language. The flow is nice except for the parts that are missing, but I will tell the author to continue this book and maybe proofread and see her mistakes, other than that, the story is very good. Am adding to my library as the errors won't keep me from reading

Starts as a Vampiress, Ends into a Villainess

authortinnnnn
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13 Chs

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authortinnnnnAuthor

Parts that are missing? I would like more detail on that (on discord/or here). Thank you for reading my work!!! Thank you for the compliments!!!

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AngelLily
AngelLilyLv13

let me tell ya on discord

authortinnnnn:Parts that are missing? I would like more detail on that (on discord/or here). Thank you for reading my work!!! Thank you for the compliments!!!
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The storyline is good and intriguing!! The character design and environment description was well done. The only thing that I found a little comfortable was the flow. A proper flow wasn't maintained and there were few grammatical errors, which can be corrected by another read. The usage of '.......' can also be decreased. Apart from that, everything else about the novel is interesting. Keep Going!!

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This is a very good novel in terms of plot and creativity. The writer's intentions are clear and though vampire novels are insanely common and cliche it's admirable that the author managed to make their's unique. However, the novel is plagued by multiple errors. It started nicely but as I read on, few errors turned into multiple errors. There's not a lot if issues with grammar but some sentences lack end marks. The story lacked a proper flow and the writer went from scene to scene without any proper transitions. As a result, I was a bit confused while reading some paragraphs. Some things mentioned in the novel were a bit contradictory and it seemed as though the author was trying to pack multiple details in a single chapter. Overall, from the synopsis, it's clear this novel will be very interesting. It has a lot of potential but the author needs to work on the flow. All the best with your writing. [img=recommend]

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As per the adult tag only, I can definitely say that there are some steamy scenes in this novel. The progression is not that bad and not too draggy, from the moment she woke up to the point where she develop a secret relationship, there are many interesting scenes in between them. While this genre might be foreign to me, I can at least follow the story without being too disoriented. Good luck in your future endeavor author!

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It's a good book, that's for sure, from the six chapters I've read, I can beat my chest and say it's a good book. Good grammar, nice concept, nice storyline. Keep it up.

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The story has great potential. As I was reading, I noticed errors here and there in terms of grammar and spelling so I'd suggest you just go back and double check your chapters. I believe that if you sort out those errors, your story will flow smoothly .Other than that, it is an interesting story and I'm definitely going to keep an eye on it. [img=recommend]

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authortinnnnnAuthor

Hi everyone!! I apologize for the grammar and everything else. I will fix it immediately. I hope you still give this book a second chance. Sincerely, authortinnnnn

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