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2021-10-02 19:51

The story has great potential. As I was reading, I noticed errors here and there in terms of grammar and spelling so I'd suggest you just go back and double check your chapters. I believe that if you sort out those errors, your story will flow smoothly .Other than that, it is an interesting story and I'm definitely going to keep an eye on it. [img=recommend]

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