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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv53yr
2021-02-25 09:13

won't beat around the bush mc doesn't seem mature for a guy who build a empire and the fact that hes like any perverted kid suchs I mean the first thing he thought about was girls not to get stronger but girls I can't take this type of harem bruh you need strength before you think about those shit and he should know that I think you need to reread your story now like how it's at 100+ chapters and see even though you have your view point it's just like every bad harem we see now a days shameless and perverted mc won't give this a bad review but wont give it 5 stars for a revenge story it started way too wrong your back in the past and you think with your dick first without the system constant mock that the mc is weak for a 10000 year old dude it's kinda sa

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crazy_immortal
crazy_immortalAuthor

noted...

CriticalReader
CriticalReaderLv2

I doubt it

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Jinrex5
Jinrex5Lv4

I doubt it too very disapointing for a revenge novel

Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

wont lie latest chapters are better seen growth in your writing just some mistakes now and again

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UncleDodger
UncleDodgerLv11

disappointed...

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Brezer
BrezerLv14

this could be a good story if it went off the description but it doesn't . the start is inline , guy goes back before the world goes crazy with a system......but does he spend his time getting ready.. nope. there is very little system stuff or training. it devolves into a cliche filled young master type mc trying to manipulate women into his harem/slave system . an example is he says how after the world changes how there is wide spread starvation from lack of food so what does he do next he becomes part owner in a restaurant and then wants to start a chain of them. mc takes a poisoned ninja as a cooking disciple then gives him a system and talks about giving him his cultivation style since none are for sale in the shop but he doesn't then sends him to Africa to kill rebels . (later they are for sale somehow even though he didn't upgrade the system which he is scared to because he doesn't trust but he has been running around like an idiot trying to get friends/slaves/comrads?.. the story starts in a dark place, betrayed by family and friends and the killed . he is mad, angry and wants revenge , ok a good story start but what we get is a guy that makes drama every day chasing women and it gets so convoluted is silly, there is a kidnapping scheme that goes on for chapters that just makes you skip, read a few lines of each chapter to see if it's still taking place if so just go to next chapter till it was over. this mc should be training and getting xp every day but he doesn't, well he fights a lot but he just knocks them out .. but later finds out he gets more xp if he kills them lol this guy is supposed to me a 1k yr old emperor that has climbed through mountains of corpses but he just knocks people out that attack him... if you are bored and want to read a wannabe Japanese /Chinese cultivation story with chan this and chan that (only from the mc not anyone else) and just want a harem story go for it otherwise it's a waste of time even for toilet reading .

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