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2021-06-21 06:52

I really like what you have going here. The MC is great and isn't one of those whiny push-overs (god I hate those) and the rest of the characters interacting with the MC is quite magical. Only thing is that I feel it's a bit rushed between the Witcher and RWBY settings and it would be better if the MC is more discreet about her abilities. She should learn how to bullshit better as sometimes too much information can be unnecessary.

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thanks for the support and for being constructive with your criticism! :)

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