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Sorria
SorriaLv44yr
2020-06-14 08:22

Honestly, your history is good but you really don't know how to express feelings, the personality of the other characters is also... weird, witchers are a bunch of serious people and I believe you failed to show that. Your progression is not also good, believe me, I had problems with history progression too but you have to show, for example, how the people get close to the Mc and start to care for her.

Vyr's journey through the multiverse

AlucardVonHellsing
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54 Chs

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AlucardVonHellsing
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yeah i'm new to writeing and i have problems when it comes to the progression. but i do have a reason the witchers a group of Very serious people attacted to Vyr easily. most witchers because of the witcher trial are more intuned with nature. Vyr is a Progenitor of all races, thus makeing the witchers very chill around her. i admit im bad at emotion but i also didnt want the story to progress that much in the witcher world yet. im glad you let me know the problem the story had and i will try and at least make them better from now on.

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Esiyx
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First of all I think that the writing quality is very good, when I read the book I don’t have any trouble understanding what the author is trying to write and the grammar is good. I’m taking one star away for stability of updates because author doesn’t post much, but when they do it’s always good so not much of a problem. Otherwise, everything is pretty good! Characters, world, and story are all well written. I would prefer if the story was slightly slower, because I just like reading those books, but the pace is already very good. Overall a good book and would recommend reading Ps sorry for the long review, just kinda thought this would help maybe brighten authors day a bit, bc as another author I know the feeling of lack of motivation.

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I love it cant wait to continue reading i only just got to the second world and already love it and need more. The writing quality is really good as well as the story cant stop reading.

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Its good, i love it, give me more Thats it and thank you

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if it would be updated more often with new chapters coming out then it would have a much higher score in my opinion

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now that RWBY volume 9 is out are you going to resume the book or are you still going to continue to hiatus because I really like this book I think it's 👍 and the best part about it is that it's a Yuri RWBY which is very rare and some of the books that make them end up just flopping at the middle of it but hey man if you need to take your time do what you got to do man we'll still be here rooting for you do you best of my life be good with you

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Immadropitall
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Great Novel the only problem was in the early chaps were they don't even bother to ask about her strange eyes. Although some of them noticed but I have a case of strange OCD wherein I love details of the Main Characters so maybe its just me. So any reader who gets mad at me for this go **** yourself this is my opinion. Great Novel Author-san please continue more.

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