I realise I take a leap by being as brutally honest as I have been while writing my review of your story. I reckon, however, that every good writer is able to accept constructive criticism, and I deem you not to be the person to be dissuaded or even discouraged by the critique listed below. I would, after all, feel horrible were it not the case. Hence, without further ado: The story has the potential to be immersive but it fails to completely grasp my attention as the rhythm is rather lacking and the characters appear to be flat, oversimplified and without dept. As a reader, I cannot relate with them and I fail to feel sympathetic or even bring myself to care for them or what happens to them. Your grammar holds slight, dismissible mistakes and I cannot say they really affect the overall quality. Everybody makes these mistakes. Itโs human. I am certainly no exception and I find your grammar to have greatly improved in the most recent chapters. I do appreciate the general enthusiasm and passion with which you tell your story. It shows in your work and in the keen way you write. It was one of the reasons that encouraged me to be entirely honest instead of being careful, for I know it takes more than some criticism to deter a passionate writer who loves what they do.
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Wow, my very first brutal review... Yes, this is the thing that I'm exactly looking for!!! The kind of inspiring **** that makes my blood pumping, to strive into heights never thought possible to reach. I hope other reviews will be as freaking honest as you. Thank you so much!!! ๐ No seriously, thank you a million times... ๐
That wink at the end tho 0////0
redmitte2x:Wow, my very first brutal review... Yes, this is the thing that I'm exactly looking for!!! The kind of inspiring **** that makes my blood pumping, to strive into heights never thought possible to reach. I hope other reviews will be as freaking honest as you. Thank you so much!!! ๐ No seriously, thank you a million times... ๐
