I realise I take a leap by being as brutally honest as I have been while writing my review of your story. I reckon, however, that every good writer is able to accept constructive criticism, and I deem you not to be the person to be dissuaded or even discouraged by the critique listed below. I would, after all, feel horrible were it not the case. Hence, without further ado: The story has the potential to be immersive but it fails to completely grasp my attention as the rhythm is rather lacking and the characters appear to be flat, oversimplified and without dept. As a reader, I cannot relate with them and I fail to feel sympathetic or even bring myself to care for them or what happens to them. Your grammar holds slight, dismissible mistakes and I cannot say they really affect the overall quality. Everybody makes these mistakes. It’s human. I am certainly no exception and I find your grammar to have greatly improved in the most recent chapters. I do appreciate the general enthusiasm and passion with which you tell your story. It shows in your work and in the keen way you write. It was one of the reasons that encouraged me to be entirely honest instead of being careful, for I know it takes more than some criticism to deter a passionate writer who loves what they do.

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Cool story. The characters seemed interesting and the interactions are hilarious. Keep up the good work!! 😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊

Damn it author, you're really good. This story got me hooked up. Please continue the good work author. I also wish I can meet you personally, tehee😂😂 😉😊😉😊😉😊😉😊😆😊😊😉😊😉😍😊😉😍😊😉😊😉😊😊😘😉😊😘😊😊😊😊😊😉😊😘😊😍😊😘😉😍😊😘😉

This was really fun to read, action packed and fast paced. The characters have great depth, and the dialogue is hilarious at the best of times. Writing wise I was pleasantly surprised to see the author's mastery of grammar improve. In the beginning there were a few grammar issues but nothing major, and towards the end I honestly couldn't find any. (I never look at punctuation since mine sucks... ^_^' ) Overall I enjoyed reading this due to the comedy and the plot :)

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CLIFFHANGERS IS AL I CAN SAY!LOVE IT........... ..... my

First review hehehe kind of new here at Webnovel. Anyways... Great job author. Love the work and I sincerely hope that you won't be quitting this anytime soon.

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