The Immortal Akira

Enjoyed the read. At times it feels like you're writing up the events of an anime. Immortality is an interesting concept, looking forward to seeing how you use it. PS. Here's a cool looking cat for motivation :)

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I am not done reading yet but yours chapters are soo good and very interesting to read and I will read your rest of the chapters soon btw good work so far

I liked the backstory of the world, despite having just a few grammatical errors the overall story is pretty good I wouldn't care if I had any comments, for me the story is good I loved the story!

Not far enough in to really know what to rate the World Background. I'm enjoying how it's going so far, and the writing quality isn't that bad, for the most part. So I would like to edit it in my down time if you don't mind, Saromaru. I'm posting my first edit of Chapter 1 Paragraph 1, in the chapter comments, in a couple of minutes if you want to check it out.

I absolutely enjoyed reading this. The writing is unique in a very good way and I love how the author describes everything. This is a must read... definitely

Keep this up love this , great job author .a few mistakes here and there but it doesn't stop this from being a wonderful book, edit where it needs to be edited and perfect this

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I can't believe I haven't made an review for this yet but here ya go my boy😎😤 %$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%%$%$%$%$%%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%&$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%$%%$%$%$%$%%$%$%$%$%$%%$%$%$%$%$%%$&$&$&$%$%$%%$%$%

Good novel. Good Author. Good stuff. Good story. Good concept. Good mc. Good writing. Author is good person. Overall it's good 👍👍[img=update][img=recommend]

I've fallen in love with this book after reading the first chapter. I paused for sometime and then read the book again and decided to leave a review. this book is recommended and totally not disappointing a great piece of work.

Came for gold ended up finding platinum. This is absolutely awesome! Won't write much since I really want to finish this and go back to writing!

For someone whose first language isn't english, the grammar is very good. I'm a sucker for systems so I might be a bit biased but I like what I've read so far. Followed!

I love your novel, very well written and the story is interesting! I hope the author has time to continue! .................................................................................

Yo, it's ur friend zel, you sent me to help you, right? Here's my review. There are flaws in how you write the narration, don't push yourself or the story might get boring. I hate the part where orcs and goblins are coming out of nowhere, It's kinda rushed. Also, the part where the mc and his friends doing investigations, I like mysteries but kinda boring. I suggest don't put too much dialogue in the chapters It felt annoying to me, the recent chapters you took my advice, good! Another suggestion as well from me: Use Grammarly and study the tenses formula, this way your book will be successful. That's all my reviews for you. I'm just advising on your work, I don't mean to force you to improve and change the story. I hope you'll be successful one day! Keep on writing! 👍

Qualidade de escrita: Eu sou brasileiro então não sei muito a escrita original mas em português tá muito bom. Estabilidade de atualizações: Bem está bom já que você postou a 2horas. (23/02/2022) Desenvolvimento da história: Está ótimo mas não cheguei no capítulo recente, mas os primeiros 6 capítulos bom. Design de personagem: Bem nos 6 capítulos não gostei muito porque pelo que eu entendi você fez o mc só pensa com força bruta sem estratégia, sabedoria no campo de combate, mas isso só vem desenvolvimento de personagem da história (Mas isso só estou falando nos primeiros 6 capítulos nada mais ja que eu ainda estou lendo seu livro!!). Plano de fundo do mundo: Está ótimo nem vou falar mais nada porque está ótimo.

Honestly, this is one of the best novels I have read, I hope the author will have time to continue writing! .............................................................

The concept of immortality is intriguing. I'm looking forward on how will you give it more depth as the story and character progresses. I like how it felts like i'm watching an anime through your writing style though, haha it's unique as well as the world background. A fascinating read. Great work author! 👍💕

The dimension of the characters within this book is just amazing. I don't know you can create characters that felt so alive and real. It felt like different people wrote them.

An interesting read. Very well thought out and written. There is no mistaken, this is a fascinating novel that must be read. Great job author.