The Writing seems a bit lacking, but as for the story and background it's really up to the standards. Over all I believe this story has some potential and might become a good one

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I need a proof reader couse english it's not my first language and even if i can write somewhat well, i can't tell how it sounds and if it's clear to the read

You're helping me a bunch... one more chapter and i'll go through them to check everything is in place, thanks a lot

Gosh i'm impressed, 5 stars? yes and it deserves it, the writing is flawless to my eye, the characters are well designed and the background seems at least as good. The stabilty of the updates is pretty good, this is surely going in my library! Keep on working hard!

The story is amazing, your writing style is even better, all the scenes are explained just ther ight way, the characters that apeared till now act very naturally, making it even more enjoyable, i can't wait to go to the end of this mistery with Nate and the others!

The Writing stile is very pleasing as well for the descriptions and design of the ambients. The characters act fully naturally and their resonces and reactions are very good as well. I fully recomand to read the book, it really keeps you locked to the screen! Nice job, Keep up with the good work!

The writing is soo good, i love your style and the main character seems well developed having good responces and reactions, it's still kind of early to judge this book, but i've enjoied it so far! Keep up with the good work

I'm loving the story till now, just too much errors, but no serious thing in the end, the rest is simply sublime. I'm wondering about many things, can't wait to read more <3

I'm really impressed, you story have its own spin around the trasmigration/reincarnation theme. The character and world design are flawlees, i'll keep an eye on this, waiting for the next chapter Veryl

Thanks imma do, I just need to put out 3 more chapters and I'll go through them to check any mistake

Sooo, i really liked the writing style of yours, and even if i'm not an extreme fan of harem it managed to keep me intrigued, the design and the behavior of the character was sublime, i can't wait to read more and to keep an eye on this. Keep this up!

So... i know is still a little to early to give a review, but since i liked the story imma give my opinion. The writing style is very descriptive and fluid, i loved how you described the moments about his past with quick flashbacks or windows on the past, as for the tecnical part there were no huge grammar mistakes that i could see, maybe a misspelling or two but appart from that i really liked it, hope for a new chapter OwO!

I can already feel their pain if they drink 3 to 4 bottles a day, poor fluff...qwq

I know... I know... but Author Review if you're interested in cultivation and system themes give it a read and let me know your opinion, it would help me greatly to understand better how to write and avoid errors, Thank you in advance! (P.s. Be as crude as you want in judging OwO)

Thanks for the comment, I'm currently checking the second chapter and soon it will be out🤗