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Constructive criticism, hope you don't take it badly. First though - I like your novel. It has enough difference from other novels of the same type, yet keeps lots of the things you would love from those novels. Fast paced, timely updates. I enjoy reading it. However, you write your story like it's a draft of the actual novel. Similar to how an author would prepare the points and events you want in a chapter before writing the actual thing. I'm not saying to write "filler" and "fluff" material just to flesh-out the chapter. I'm glad this novel does NOT do that, but you need to develop situations and events more. Practice that, then do it on this novel, and I think you'll grow as an author, and have a great novel on your hands. Lastly - I'm going to vote for your novel. I think it has massive potential

i don't know what to say this story is fuc"ing amazing keep it wish you all the best kkkkkkkkkkkeeeeeeeeeeeepppppppppp iiiiiiiiiiiiiittttttttttttttt uuuuuuuuuuupppppppppp

This novel is still still incredibly overrated due to 1) someone spamming 5 star reviews over and over, and 2) the novel itself is written very poorly. Sentences are stilted, with no real descriptions. It's like I'm reading a play giving bare bones directions, not a book. These characters don't feel real.

It's one of the best story I've ever read I had to read it twice maybe three times cuz the author won't match release the chapters even though I gave them power stones now I'm going to have to read it again while for chapters

If one can spam fake 5 stars reviews, Does it mean is ok tk spam one stars as well? Im am taking that logic as a yes.... Shameless author just how many accts you have? Of course excluding the fresh bloods

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Writing quality criticism: " This is wrong way to space quotation marks . " "This is the right way to space quotation marks." Character design criticism: Readers will appreciate it if you describe how the main character looks, what he wants to do overall, and what his favorite things are. Favorite things as in hobbies, quirks, etc. In other words detail! Give me something to help imagine the scene. Word background criticism: What year is it? How does that time period differ? Has peoples fashion sense changed? Describe the environment in the planet. Anything else about the human culture different? Is KFC still on the downturn in the United States?!! Is the United States now called The Colnel Confederacy? Thanks

One of the best Overpowered storyline I've ever read.. I paid 1 trillion system points for this novel.. ^,^ 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

This novel is STILL even incredibly overrated due to 1) someone spamming 5 star reviews over and over, and 2) the novel itself is written very poorly. Sentences are stilted, with no real descriptions. It's like I'm reading a play giving bare bones directions, not a book. These characters don't feel real.

This novel is still incredibly overrated due to 1) someone spamming 5 star reviews over and over, and 2) the novel itself is written very poorly. Sentences are stilted, with no real descriptions. It's like I'm reading a play giving bare bones directions, not a book. These characters don't feel real.

This novel is incredibly overrated due to 1) someone spamming 5 star reviews over and over, and 2) the novel itself is written very poorly. Sentences are stilted, with no real descriptions. It's like I'm reading a play giving bare bones directions, not a book. These characters don't feel real.

didn't really like the novel felt everything moving at a slow pace and some weird impractical things happening every now and then overall i wasn't impressed but its not the worst novel i read its just bland because of how many novels i have read that start exactly the same way

Just to fill 140 characters , keep it up 😍 😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏😏🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂😏😏😏🙄🙄☺☺🙂🤗😏😏🙄☺🙂🙂😏

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Haha keep up it going great and its a fun read but it also has a complicated weapon arsenal but its also easy to understand keep it going For the 140 word count-)7:8;):7;$;);8;);7;:):7&;!;)djjdhddndb

This is a great novel so far with consistent releases. The ideas are original and refreshing and the characters are well thought out. Plot seems well thought out and I can't wait to see new characters being introduced, maybe new love interests ;) please don't drop this novel

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Honestly the story is full of plot holes, but i loved it. I didn't like the ending though. Well it's good enough for a first work. I hope there was more action in all the individual worlds. Sure hope the author's next work is even better than this.

I dropped this novel before and i was bored and found it again and decided to give it another try but I just couldn’t... First of all you meet someone and ask the person to join without explaining to detail what you want him to do and he just agrees and then you go ahead and give everything to him for free and he asks no questions whatsoever and just went ahead with it... Secondly you meet a girl who is older than you and she gave you her number and hit on you , ok I understand the fact that because it’s your first time you would want to go on a date with her but to ask her to marry you on your first date when you are only 17 WTF who does that and there are far more beautiful girls out there and also you no nothing about this girl... This novel just seems like it’s the authors wet dream and how he wants his life to be so he just write everything down without thinking that it wouldn’t be him reading the novel and also you put the restricted pa but all i see is a na*ve kind hearted boy who is an id*ot....