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Derek_LycanLv44mth
2024-06-18 14:48

Great so far. writing needs some fine tuning. minor phrasing error. update... I would prefer more frequent world and character design seems good so far. 4/5 for character. Depending on how the story goes this can be either good fanfic or mediocre. Please gor the love of everything good in this world, DO NOT MAKE THE MC A SYSTEM SLAVE OR SYSTEM DEPENDENT .

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theusual Amazing Fanfic Keep up the great work You can do this One Piece fanfic idea directly after One Piece: Hashirama One Piece: Saiyan of the Strawhats A One Piece fan has watched the anime up until egghead arc and read the manga in its entirety. So when he wakes up in a white room with a blue screen that says choose your race for the world of one piece. So He chooses to be a saiyan and then there is a bright flash of light and he wakes up on an island in the east blue a year before luffy goes out to sea. MC won’t show up until the start of Syrup Village Arc. MC’s Opponents(Pre-Timeskip) by Arc: Syrup Village:Puma (Marvel) Baratie : Archer (Fate)(No Magic) Arlong Park: Zabuza Momochi Drum Island: Sub-Zero (Mortal Kombat) Alabasta: Mr.X aka Asuma Sarutobi (Naruto) Enies Lobby: Takeda (Mortal Kombat) Thriller Bark: Kakuzu (Naruto) Super Attacks(Pre-Timeskip):Double Sunday,Die Die Missile Barrage,Milky Cannon, Burning Attack, Light Grenade, Spirit Bomb. Ultimate Attacks (Pre-Timeskip): Final Flash, Super Kamehameha, Super Galick Gun. MC’s Opponents(Post-Timeskip) by Arc: Fishman Island: Kisame Hoshigaki Dressrosa: Chuuya Nakahara Whole Cake Island: Super Buu Wano Country: Baran(Dragon Quest) Egghead Island: Atlas (Teen Titans) Super Attacks(Post-Timeskip): Galick Gun,Atomic Blast ,Die Die Missile Barrage, Burning Attack,Big Bang Attack, Burning Slash, Hellzone Grenade,Power Rush. Ultimate Attacks Post-Timeskip: Final Kamehameha, Atomic Kamehameha, Spirit Sword, Warp Kamehameha, Final Shine Kamehameha,Power Wall. Harem Kaya Nami Nojiko Alvida Mikita aka Miss Valentine Zala aka Miss Double Finger Raki Gina Nico Robin Kalifa Perona Boa Hancock Boa Sandersonia Boa Marigold Aphelandra Sadi (One Piece) Monet Viola Charlotte Smoothie Charlotte Citron Charlotte Cinnamon Wanda Carrot Kozuki Hiyori Ulti Black Maria Solitaire Stussy Vegapunk/Lilith Vegapunk/York

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