BigDreamWriter
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if you read the story a little more, which you didn't since you said you hated it. It would've said it
Ok I will try my best to explain. A person hired Rae-gi right? The person who hired Rae-gi, tailed him to see if he was doing the job properly. But the thugs that Rae-gi was hired to defeat, killed the person who hired Rae-gi. I hope you understand.
Thats the way the bullies are in fictional novels.
At this part, imagine that you were getting bullied. They dump something at you and you go to the bathroom. The bullies would obviously follow you and bully you there.
He is a loser, he grew up in an abusive family. He closed his eyes since there was no other thing he can do, he couldn't run as they would shoot him. I also needed a way to start his character development
I dont even know how to explain this to you. This paragraph, saying:("Who Sent You?" They said to Rae-gi. Rae-gi, not thinking much of it, said he got orders.) The quotation mark on "Who sent You?" indicates that someone is talking, The part saying "They said to Rae-gi" Means that they asked Rae-gi the question "Who Sent You". Rae-gi then replied and said he got orders. I dont mean to offend you but in one comment where you were talking about my novel, you made a lot of spelling errors. So I dont think you are one to talk.
After reading this paragraph, I actually got embarrassed, I will change this ASAP
This is my first story so let me try to reply to all your comments. He tripped him to get his attention, the person who tripped him was the person who was hired to go to the factory.
A really good story overall but I feel like story should have started off with something peaceful, then the zombie outbreak starts. Because I feel like showing zombies at the very start of the chapter is not really something good. Since we all want the peace before the disaster. And I also think that the character should life a normal life in the few first chapters and then a civilian gets infected. The spread mostly starts in an enclosed space so the virus spreads faster. Just my opinion, the others might think differently. Overall really good story[img=recommend]