netrics07
An anime otaku who tried writing stories similar to the things l watched. Mimicry is the highest form of flattery, I believe.
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Wonderfully written from the start. The way the character's looks and feelings were described was like it was a published best-selling novel. Very vivid descriptions make every scene clear. Character dialogue was very spot-on and realistic. There also seem to be some real-world commentaries that were sprinkled in but all of them were appropriate and somewhat true. Great start and keep doing your best, Author!
Obligatory Author review. This one is a dream project of mine, as I have been long inspired by the anime "The Devil is a Part-timer". For the longest time, I have wanted to write something similar. This story is inspired by that anime with its own twist. Hope you find it interesting and support it in the future. Thanks!
Character interactions are very interesting and funny. The story premise is interesting. Although, from a scene and character description standpoint, it is quite lacking. Since a lot of characters are introduced in the first chapter alone, it would be nice if there is a way to differentiate them. The locations and the characters need to be described in more detail so the reader can imagine what these look like. There are some grammatical and minor spelling errors, but the author said that the work is still being reviewed so these may change in the future. Keep up the good work, Author.
As some have already noted, the format of the work is not that of a novel. If the author intended for this style, then I must admit this is not something in line with the works of webnovel, so it may not be everyone's cup of tea. Though there is a message one can bring out of reading this work, I'm afraid the format holds it back for the majority of the possible readers. Good luck with your future endeavors, author.
converse* with everyone
testing my patience*
Scene and background description are really good. It is as if you can see and feel what is going on. Characters are well-described. There are some grammatical errors with verbs and tenses. I would also like to recommend not putting sounds coming from objects in quotation marks because that is usually reserved for speech/dialogue. You can just describe the sound in a sentence or phrase. Also, I'm not sure about some of the characters calling themselves in the third person, but that maybe just my preference and does not bother other readers. Please keep up the good work, Author.
The intriguing plot and seemingly colorful characters are bogged down by grammatical and spelling errors, incorrect prepositions and the choice of not using quotation marks for speech. There are a lot of things to improve, but the potential of a great story is already there. Also, as a personal opinion, Webnovel likes their stories more in the "novel"-like style of writing, so you may want to consider that. Best of luck to you, Author!
First off, the scenes are great and you can really feel the emotion of the character. The author can really describe things and scenarios in a way you can see it in your mind. Writing quality is top notch. Just a minor quibble, based from reading the first chapter alone, the main character is not as defined to be male or female, so I was wondering at the end of it. But it is in the summary, so if you read that first, then there is no issue I guess. Great job and continue doing your best, Author.
Very nice! Will leave a review. Although, and I don't know if it was just me, but just reading that full chapter, I had no idea if the main character was a man or woman... I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, or if it's important at this point. But the scenes are great and you can really feel the emotion of the character.
This is the obligatory author review for my story! If you're interested in anime/light novel style of writing and background, then I really recommend you to read this novel. My inspiration for this story is the anime 'The Devil is a Part-timer." This has romance/comedy all packaged in a fantasy and Japanese high school background. I really hope you give it a try!