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The demonic celestial

นักเขียน: Okika252
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อ่านนิยาย The demonic celestial โดย ผู้เขียน Okika252 ที่เผยแพร่บน WebNovel.James a biochemist in his past life just got murdered by his best friend he is then transmigrated into the body of a youth without celestial veins watch at how he rules the heavens as the celestial ...

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James a biochemist in his past life just got murdered by his best friend he is then transmigrated into the body of a youth without celestial veins watch at how he rules the heavens as the celestial sovereign

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Technology And Tensura

Cover art does NOT belong to me, However when I found it I could not find any credits, if this is your image and you would like me to take it down, please tell me. R18, no lemons or porn, but it will be suggestive and there will be some very graphic vocabulary and descriptions, so be advised. Mention of dark subject like rape included, so not for the faint of heart. This was written purely as a Pasion project and as such has no fixed schedule, I have only written a novel once before this and I abandoned that one real quick, if any of you (if anyone at all is actually reading this) enjoy my story and wish for me to put more time into this I would appreciate if you leave a review and or edit suggestions, I am open to constructive criticism and since I don't have a lot planned out, ideas for the future, again this is simply something I wanted to write and might be dropped at any time, if you want more, please support me, thank you. After killing himself to avoid spending the rest of his life as a vegetable in the hospital doing nothing but costing money to his family and being a burden to others Sebastian is given a chance to reincarnate in another world, Due to his slightly abnormal priorities he is able to gain incredible abilities and reincarnate into Tensura with his memories intact and without parents, however he has never watched/read Tensura but heard of if from others so he wont know future events, He will know the important Nations/Characters names and no more. The mc will be reincarnated when veldenava creates the universe but will not be there for long, you'll see. The mc will be slightly unhinged and has a different set of morals as to the average person, He views rape as the worst crime any being could ever commit, and cheating on your spouse to be a close second, although he sees no problem in having multiple casual relationships as long as all people involved are aware, and unless all parties are fine with it having multiple dedicated relationships is evil, he sees no issue with killing others should they threaten him, people close to him, or innocent lives, but he is not a hero, he will not sacrifice himself or people close to him for a random person he doesn't know, he is a bit of a battle junkie but only enjoys fighting people with similar skill to his own and dislikes fighting people weaker than him, but will still fight back if he is attacked, the mc will likely spend most of the novel referred to as a he however they can change their gender at will and have no problem with being a women, however they are strictly attracted to women, not men, so if you don't like that then don't read this also I likely wont write any smut but it will be implied, and if you don't like Yuri or the views on gender, good for you, I couldn't care less. they also have less of an attachment to life than others and might be slightly reckless at times however paradoxically they enjoy doing things as efficiently as possible, The mc is very powerful but not perfect, if you couldn't tell already this is pretty much a self insert so yeah.

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Dark_Reality
Dark_RealityLv4Dark_Reality

Okay first off please use Grammarly or ProWritingAid as there are a lot of mistakes in the story which ruins the entire reading experience. Suggestion: (He called his best friend Andres to come because he was his best friend) No need for the second best friend as it is already implied they are best friends. The sentences are also really long try to space them out. There are some unique words which is good. If you do not improve the story many people will not continue to read it so my suggestion is to rewrite every chapter because the story can be good but if the writing is bad then readers will not stick around. That is the case with this one.

daoist_om
daoist_omLv4daoist_om

I like it,it's just the wall of text intimidates me more than anything,by any chance do you write in mobile, if you do then hats off I tried that and it takes a lot of effort, so yeah break the paragraphs more reedit the prologue i was scared as heck when I saw that wall of text. Other than that it's good novel I like it.

soulla
soullaLv1soulla

Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.

DRACONIAN619
DRACONIAN619Lv13DRACONIAN619

I loved the story.i really like the direction the story is going in. Please don't drop the story. I loved how when i was reading it it made me feel like i was part of the story.

MishalZamir
MishalZamirLv4MishalZamir

Okay so now I've reviewed it. It seems like an intriguing novel and the story development is nicely done. Just try to use less commas and the vocab is also fine. The background design is so-so-Overall everything is done in a great manner (Well it isn't my genre but I read it for the review swaps) ;) Good luck DUN FORGET TO REVIEW MY NOVEL!

EldridSmith
EldridSmithLv5EldridSmith

I'm not that great at review, on_a_jeep is much better at it than I am, however I will say you're doing a good job, and to keep up the good work.

Omni237
Omni237Lv2Omni237

Thought it was a great novel would like for you to remove the wall of text will be well appreciated can't wait for the remaining chapters!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!+++++++++++(

BabyTanuki
BabyTanukiLv5BabyTanuki

I like the idea. Also, very nice picture for the cover. The names of the people are very relatable and the setting seems interesting so far. I feel you do a good job balancing out the dialogue and the text . You really need to use Grammarly. You have many punctuation errors and run-on sentences. Another thing that will help you is if you split your paragraphs more. They are long and difficult to read. Before you write more, I strongly suggest running the past chapters through the website/program I talked about earlier. I know you will only get better with time! Go Author!

HavenlyJeep
HavenlyJeepLv5HavenlyJeep

Story Premise (3 out of 5): - Transmigration. Enough said. Writing Quality (3 out of 5): - I don't mind the grammar since you've said you're not that fluent in English. But, there's too much info dump in the first few chapters. Split the paragraph into smaller sections. For example, make a rule that a paragraph consists of only three or four sentences at max. Use Google Docs to make sure you don't have missing commas and dots. Updates (5 out of 5): - Daily. Story Development (4 out of 5): - Pretty good so far. The pace is okay. But the long paragraphs make it hard too read. Reduce info dumps as much as possible. Character Design (3 out of 5): - I like to criticize on characters. So, there's not much description about the MC's looks and the people around him aside from the basics. The MC loves reading, so there's that. Other than the father (and Bernard), there's no one that I can get myself to look more into. Need more distinct traits are what I meant to say. World Background (4 out of 5): - Due to the info dump at the first few chapters, it's all been established. The surroundings need more descriptions.

Okika252
Okika252นักเขียนOkika252

This the author here I will shamelessly give myself five star this is my first book and English is not my first language so bear with me and try to tell me of where I am wrong and can improve and I will try to do so

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