past tense future perfect

I like the story! The plot is interesting and innovative and you did a great job with it. There's a few tense mistakes here and there (past-tense, future-tense, etc.) but otherwise the writing quality is good!

This is a hard read, past tense used were future tense should be, the naming, sentence structure, the working in of exposition. I think the story could have a lot of potential, but it is in serious need of an editor.

Just one problem It's the bad English Sometimes he's taking in past tense, Sometimes future tense, or he just straight up combined all the tense in one single paragraph. Because of that it's hard and confusing to understand what he's trying to say.(at least for me) But other than that the story is pretty good.

PAST TENSE OR PRESENT TENSE. PLEASE CHOOSE ONE AND STICK WITH IT

The story itself, although somewhat predictable, is enjoyable. The one thing that bothered me the most was the quality of the writing. Although I do not expect perfect grammar or descriptions, the writing still, in my opinion, fell flat. The grammar was decent (sparse grammar mistakes), however the tenses shifted multiple times and I couldn’t help but notice the shifts. The story is told in past tense yet I would occasional notice that it had somehow shifted to present tense then back to past tense. The writing itself is somewhat bland. I would hope that there would be less repetition in future chapters and more vivid descriptions. This is just what I felt when reading this story. I am not at all saying that the writing is bad. It is quite far from it but could use some improvement. Perhaps it will improve in future chapters. This is just what I thought when reading the first few chapters.