writing in present tense

I like first person writing, but not in present tense. There are a lot of grammatical issues like putting past a nd present tense words in the same sentence and merging sentences together. Otherwise, it is an enjoyable read with an interesting plot.

The writing quality is good. But since you're writing from a past perspective, don't mix it up with present tense. something like end should be written as ended when something that you're trying to say. 'has' is a present tense and 'had' is past. Don't confuse it

The story is good but the author needs to improve their writing style. Except for the grammatical mistakes and past tense, present tense confusion in the paras, this is a really good read. Hope to see the author's improvement in their writing style as the novel progresses.

PAST TENSE OR PRESENT TENSE. PLEASE CHOOSE ONE AND STICK WITH IT

The concept is interesting! As an English teacher, I have some advice if you don't mind me sharing though: I've noticed that you tend to switch back and forth between present-tense and past-tense often. This can be distracting when trying to immerse yourself, and it can interrupt the flow when you're trying to form a mental image of what's happening. Likewise, the vast majority of published novels are written entirely in past-tense, as past-tense words have stronger undertones in the reader's mind when forming mental images. (The only exception to this past-tense restriction is dialogue.) To take some examples from the first chapter: "...relationships can affect how severe" (present-tense) "But this case looks" (present-tense) "This situation confused Aizen" (past-tense) "...now he hasn't remarried" (present-tense) "hard work paid off" (past-tense) "Aizen succeeded in creating" (past-tense) There are also some other grammatical issues, but the writing quality in this novel is still better than 90% of the other novels on this site. The writing has a lot of potential, so I'm giving it a 5-star rating anyways.