story critique example

Butcher's Graffiti

arbiter

2020-06-06

Those who gave very low rating are really retardde, their arguments on why they gave it such low ratings is retardde too, basically, they are retardde, lacks comprehension, a third rate reader, very dumb. Example, they said this is generic, lol, really retardde, i wont spoil, just read, every book should be given a chance to read before deciding, dont listen to any critique, be the critique yourself.

Bank of the Universe

Girl Wears Short Skirt · Eastern

620 Chs

Bakadin

2020-01-05

The LN is so much better compared to the Anime & Manhwa versions. My only point of critique is the constant mixup between Mu Ning Xue & Mu Nu Jiao. Otherwise really well translated & well developed storyline. Way better than TDG for example.

Versatile Mage

Chaos (Fish's Sky) · Fantasy

3168 Chs

MilesMorales92

2026-07-25

This is a critique (loki odin son) of a secondary account belonging to the story's creator; a run-of-the-mill AI-generated story wouldn't make anyone want to write such an in-depth (and false) critique.

X-Men: Never Chosen, Only Carrier

Erin_Yeg · Movies

21 Chs

StayathomeDad

2020-03-28

Overall great story cant wait for more love this storys luffy smarter stronger amazing captain and ladys man to boot love it only critique i have is the repetition of the names said example like a seen with only luffy and nami repeats nami's name like waaaay to much but really other than that love this fan fic its fricken the s**t

One Piece: Reincarnation (HIATUS~~~)

Harem_Prince · Anime & Comics

25 Chs

Infinite Immortal Cultivation players

Jiu Yuanzi didn't expect that an innocent little fairy like her, who was just sitting on the steps and eating melons, would be the scapegoat and be kicked down to the human world. She became a [weak, pitiful, and helpless] little demon fairy with only a few hundred million beautiful spots. Forced by life, the kind and simple little demon immortal Jiuyuanzi could only say timidly,"You only need to pay a little bit of money to buy your life." What bad intentions could a beautiful little demon immortal have?

the fourth day of the first month

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Lian Fu Jun Zi

What is love, accompany a lifetime, go to the mountains and rivers together. Hell Head x Heavenly God When Li Zexi died, his curled up body was nailed to a wooden stake. Jiang Zhi just stood under the moonlight, his eyes cold like the stars. "I found you." If the path you take towards me is dark and dull, I will always guarantee that the stars in the sky will protect you. "You are only yourself. There is no need to live for others." "There are so many things in this world. I don't want anything but you." (Ghosts, demon beasts, feng shui, folk customs, group portraits, family fun ~)

liangxi

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One Punch Lu Mingfei: " Out of interest, Dragon King, retreat."

Fake Lu Mingfei thought,'I'm a person who occasionally goes crazy! The real Lu Mingfei, I'm just a hero who's out of interest. Fake Lu Mingfei: Lu Mingze, I want to exchange a quarter of my health! The real Lu Mingfei thought,'I've become stronger, and I've become bald. I can deal with the Dragon King with one punch. If one punch isn't enough, I'll give you two!'

Nagano slowly

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After the live broadcast, I became the ruler of the galaxy

Fu Xing had transmigrated into a book, and he had become a nameless cannon fodder in a book he had written for an interstellar live broadcast. The reality was- The Wasteland Era swept toward her with the apocalypse. Fu Xing: No, she's my mother. Later on- Fu Xing, who only wanted to live, did not expect to become the strongest in the infinite domain. [Ding, you have cleared the dungeon ×××] [Real-time viewers in the live streaming room broke 2 million ~ 4.7 million total views] [Another 17,000 viewers have followed you.] [Host, please keep up the good work.] Fu Xing: Who else? Anti-fans: Enough! Until one day, the interstellar monarch who had never shown his face used a smurf account to send a large amount of gifts to Fu Xing and was attacked by anti-fans. The officials had no choice but to reveal their identities,[Idiot, that's your king!]

Yun Jiu Farewell

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Put it on quickly, my brother is jealous

(1v1 sweet pet investment is not a loss!) Thousand-year-old Phoenix VS Ten-thousand-year-old Parasol Tree The little prince of the Phoenix Clan exploded in anger because his lover was often remembered by others! His Essence Soul was directly shattered into pieces. As the lover of the little prince, Bai Tong had no choice but to go to the three thousand worlds to search for the remnants of his little prince's Essence Soul. … "My dear Tong Tong, only I can see your light, okay?" The next day, the famous celebrity Bai Tong announced that she would leave the entertainment industry forever. The reason for her withdrawal was to go home and accompany her lover. "I'm going to bring you back to the sea secretly. Then you'll be mine." "Alright, I'll pack my luggage now." Genius Painter Brother: "Only I can discover your beauty. From today onwards, you will only smile at me." "Okay, I'll only smile at you in the future." …… In short, her brother was really too easily jealous!

Silver Ink Rain

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