"An everyday man gets thrown into the world of twilight thousands of years before the start of the plot. With immortality and incredible abilities. How will this man's presence change the outcome of the original story?" [ this is a slow-burn fanfiction; the MC is just trying to experience life and enjoy it, not to take over the world and rule from the shadows.] I do not own twilight or the characters of the twilight world, all that belongs to me are my own characters.
This story made me hold my breath. There is drama and mystery and the occult. My heart aches for Emma. She has so many issues, and I knew what will happen between Emma and Leo because of the summary, but I still wished that it happened differently. I mean... it was her first time, yet it turned out to be a big mess. Poor girl. Well, kudos to you, author, for making me feel for the girl. Writing quality is good and so is the flow, I didn't even notice how quickly I read chapter after chapter. 👍 --- The only improvement suggestion I have is that the first few chapters are a bit dry with a lot of background narration. It would have a bigger impact if you started the story with Emma getting a call from Ty, and whatever information was revealed before that call, to be sprinkled through the story.