Qiao Nan: Crap! I am your biological daughter, yet I am treated as if I was picked up from the streets. In fact, you treat me worse than that! Mother Qiao: Qiao Nan, you are not as pretty or smart as your elder sister. You are not as blessed as her. You have no right to study, marry, or to have your happiness! Qiao Nan: Why am I not allowed to study, marry, or to seek my happiness? I will find a man right now and marry him! Qiao Nan is dumbstruck upon discovering that the man right beside her is a powerful figure in the quad—the person who has the most promising prospects to be the future Chief. Qiao Nan stares at the well-built man in front of her. He has firm abs and cold, chilling eyes. She swallows the lump in her throat as she says her greetings, "Good Morning, Chief!"
Slowly from beginning theres small imperfections of ones not having spaces furcon the sentences…but if it stopped there it would’ve been mah okay and could keep going and whatnot but…chapter 3 is unreadable, sentences without spaces, and random caps inbetween and overall…no spaces means no sentences, means no paragraph, which means no story in end. Concept is good, the background tho only thru two pages seems like it’s starting out flushed, but…no spaces no story in end. And in that way, that one thing ruins it all. Fix that, and make it readable, then you’d have a very good story author, or well one that can have the potential to be good.