sentences to start and end a story

Good start, I would suggest that you go back to chapter one to remove the last few sentences, those were supposed to be for the start of the chapter, not the end.

Words weird at start, and in end stopped me from being able to continue reading. Mostly due to the fact it’s hard to understand the meaning of the sentences.

Its an interesting story and I was drawn in from the start. I like how realistic it is. However the writing could be much better. Mainly the sentences, the sentences may as well be paragraphs. If the sentences were cut down some and there was more description then this would receive five stars.

Many edits has to be made author. There are sentences that doesn't start with capital letters. Dialogues are not starting with capital letters too and does not end with comma (if an active convo) or period (if the end of convo) or punctuations or question marks. You have a nice story and I hope you will put efforts to edit it. Peace ✌️ I don't want to be critical though but maybe you need my suggestions. 😉

All of reviews with 5 stars have to be friends with the author because I haven't seen such a garbagefire of a story in a while. The grammar is just awful and the weirdest thing is that the words the author uses are more on the complex end of English but the flow, it just doesn't flow at all. The author does not know how to write sentences that flow properly, nor does he use "," in a proper way either. How can someone write a paragraph where all the sentences start with But... Just don't.