can there be multiple exposition in a story

The writing quality was garbage. Please work on it. The entire story was predictable and cringe. The characters were generic and the way they talked was horrible and cringe. The world was so generic that I rolled my eyes multiple times. Now, with my biggest issue, ducking exposition, so much exposition, half of the chapters sometimes are just exposition, for f's sake, stop.

Review up to around #30. Grammar and spelling are well above average, the story is a slow burn but is slowly progressing at a steady pace, plenty of character development... However... the biggest issue for me is the exposition dumps, monologuing, and unnatural conversations. For example, early on an entire chapter is dedicated to a exposition dump on beasts, which could have been edited down considerably to something much more concise, or even better, have the information naturally dispersed throughout the story. Characters frequently exposition dump or explain things in excruciating detail, spanning multiple long paragraphs without pause, often repeating the same concept multiple times. This makes many conversations feel more like a lecture than a natural conversation. The author could remedy this by having the other characters in the scene interact more, asking questions, pondering on the information provided, or have the characters physically move in the scene.

Love the beginning of the exposition and the foreshadowing of what will happen next in this story. I vote for the third member in Valen's harem will be Agnes Demille. And I believe his interactions and relationships with Wednesday, Enid, and Agnes will be filled with multiple reactions when they find out or witness Valen's powers as an eidolon/siren hybrid and being in a love rectangle with a gothic psychic, a werewolf, and a vanisher (outcast that can turn invisible)!!!!!!!

Awful. I can barely even call this a fanfic, it's just a "shorter" version of the novel with some slight changes. The Shrek Devils lose all their character and the author does nothing to go outside his comfort zone by changing up the plot a little. It looked good at first but goes down hard in the end since it just follows the plot of the original novel. And the writing quality is rubbish, just endless word vomit across multiple chapters, it's all just exposition, exposition, exposition and terribly structured too. It's like the author is afraid of making actual conversations between characters and just copies stuff from the novel. It's painfully obvious and it's crystal clear that everything bends over so that author can copy as much as possible from the novel, to the point that there really is no purpose in the MC existing since he brings very little uniqueness to the story. In the end nothing MC matters since nothing changes from the original. Disappointed

Boy do you love exposition. I am not a fan of exposition. That being said. For a historical novel you can get away with a little more. However, don't let it get in the way of the story. There were a couple of places where the exposition almost ruined big reveals. Look at your work and ask yourself, how much do I really need for the story, be honest about it. I swear you'll improve