ash kisses delia fanfic

sorry bro but I kinda feel this story was so much alike compared to kokujin Ntr imagine ash as hiroki , delia as kaede man if you want to have a harem be bold not do it behind ash's back it's not like he is going to oppose for his mother's happiness 😒

c'mon man, it's been a good story till now, but can you proofread it? the chapter 16 there is three or four times it was supposed to be twerp or brat but instead it says ash, and idk if it is the 15th chapter that he talks to Delia and serena mother instead of them saying hello this is Delia, or hello this is (whatever serena mother name is), no they say: hello this is ash's mother and hello this is Serena's mother, c'mon just proofread it a bit. aside from this i don't have more to complain as I'm still on chapter 17 or so, but this going to be tiring if it continues this way

This novel was fine until movie 3, the author promised too much and the only thing he did was to make "fate" prevent Ash from remembering the plot, that he cannot move at crucial moments and marry his mother Delia with a random guy justifying it and even killed the random guy's wife to marry him to Delia, It was pretty disappointing and probably a lot of people dropped out in that arc including me.

Needs to get a move on, 295 chapters and only 1-3 kisses and not one of them was from ash. Stop lingering on 1 part that should only take 5-10 chapters but instead takes 50

One of the best of Ash novel I have read so far. This particular book made me had sleepless night gush was just too good. Now Iam reading TCO and it fantastic. Good work ash. More grace to you. Kisses and love 💋